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JediRaver
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since 2002-08-16
Posts 23
ATL, GA, USA

0 posted 2002-10-24 11:52 PM


Amazing were
those past few days
that I have shared with you.
My darling dear.
My angel blue.
And timeless were
our conversations
when we began to open up
our inquisitive young minds;
together laughing
with nothing that I'd rather do
but stay right here
and be with you.
If only I could make you see
just how amazing we could be
to share a chance at life together
from now until the end of time...
we'll redefine "FOREVER"!
Amazing were
these past few nights
so precious I would say.
My Darling Dear.
My perfect Sunny Day!
that eternally I'll always feel
our constellations
shining out and touching us
would "Forever" freeze this moment here
with you alone tonight.
And if I could show you constant joy
in warming words from rose red hearts;
to crystalize your tears of bliss
I'd fill them all with the energy of stars
whose soothing light transverses galaxies
and gives itself
from me to you
within a sweet and gentile kiss.

-Jedi

© Copyright 2002 Ryan Flanagan - All Rights Reserved
JediRaver
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since 2002-08-16
Posts 23
ATL, GA, USA
1 posted 2002-10-24 11:53 PM


actually this is my poem.."If I could"...the other one was just miss typed, it was called "My burden"...thanx for all the critiques everyone...

-Ryan

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA
2 posted 2002-10-25 12:48 PM


I like this poem a lot

Cold hands means a warm heart

garysgirl
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since 2002-09-29
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3 posted 2002-10-25 01:09 PM


Ryan, this is a very good poem. Of course, I love it, being the hopeless romantic that I am. Thanks for sharing your heart with us.


Love To All,
Ethel....garysgirl

Radrook
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since 2002-08-09
Posts 648

4 posted 2002-10-30 04:27 PM


Everything is good and fine as long as it is reciprocal!

Enjoyed!
God bless!


Mistletoe Angel
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5 posted 2002-10-30 04:48 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, and may your request be fulfilled and may your heart too always be kissed with ecstasy! (sigh) This is gorgeous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ryan, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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