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Is it You? |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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 Dimly thoughts slip-stream October’s night mist shadows Left behind kisses Darkness stills, slipping away Slip-streaming thoughts, is it you? |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
A vapor quasar Swings the sky, your pendulum Territories marked Unraveled paraselene Of your exclusive smile  (sigh) This is gorgeous, sweet friend, I love the metaphors here, as even as the days grow shortter this time of year the light don't sleep! (big huggssssss) This is marvelous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (10-24-2002 10:26 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ah Karilea..a beautiful Tanka. Somewhere in time...perhaps?  ~Hugs sweet poetess~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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Siofra
since 2000-09-28
Posts 551State of Suspended Passion |
This is lovliness. "My ears have not yet drunk a hundred words |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
A beautiful blending of images,Karilea...the mists formed at night and softly lit by moonlight during October are so beautiful... ...believe what your heart feels... |
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Robert Adamson Member
since 2002-10-21
Posts 328PA/USA |
I cherish your words. Thank you. etoodog |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
What an enchanting Tanka! .....I just did a mini meditation with all the lights out in my office and stared at this mesmerizing picture of the moon. Thanx for the Moon, Sun! EA |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I should be so lucky!  Beautiful, Sunshine.... |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Nope, just wishing it was |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Awesome, Karilea. Thanks for sharing. Love To All, Ethel |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..Sunshine../\..yes, very songlike; lovely poem../\..Spiros ---------------------- |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
I see there's a line. So maybe it wasn't me.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Maybe it wasn't me either, but I wish it was. Beautiful work Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
Only one answer remains. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Very nice, Sunshine... seems you're still trying to find that happy medium behind excessively short poetry, and excessively long poetry...  Seriously, though... loved this. The picture worked really well with the poem, which makes me wonder, did you write the poem before you found the picture, or did you write the poem based on the picture? Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Noah, your lexis is showing, and how delighted I am to see it grace my poem...thank you! Enchantress, definitely, somewhere, in time.... Siofra, thank you so very much for reading... Scorpio, October can indeed be a splendid month, whether evening, or early, early morning... Robert, what a lovely comment, Sir. Thank you! Linda, when I read your comment last night, you enticed me to turn off the overhead lights to see what you saw...and he waved! Balladeer, whassa matter? You don't have a moon overhead? Sure you do...just step outside and look! Auguste, thank you! Ethel, you are very welcome, it is certainly my pleasure! Spiros, yes, it could be a song...thank you for thinking so... Larry, thank YOU for the smile and giggle! Kethry, you do fine on your own, and you know it! More, please! Moonlight Romeo, what a thoughtful reply. Thank you! Allan...with all seriousness aside, whyever would you want me to stick to only one style? That's kind of like asking the Sun to only come out in summer, y'know?  Now, as to the real question...my new camera and I are having fun...and the picture was taken before the poem, about five days ago...and I let it simmer, then I played with it just a little, although the ghostly shadow was there all along...and then the poem came along, as ever was meant to do so... Thanks again for the read![This message has been edited by Sunshine (10-25-2002 01:51 PM).] |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
I wish! lol - Great poem, Karilea. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
LJA...don't you see that ship there in the shadows? Are you sure it wasn't? |
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