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A statue |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
wind rain wearing away layers of solid rock I remember a time before I turned to stone. I was young vibrant with energy. Invincible and happy. I remember the insults the ones that hardened me that turned my face to stone the ones that solidified me into this rock a statue. I remember the look I had upon my face the moment I froze. A look of pain, of hurt and betrayal. They laughed. Oh how they laughed to see my tears, but they were blind to the stone. I remember the years of stillness dwelling on the insults remembering my pain turning into rock the fixedness of my thoughts reflected in the immovability of my limbs. I remember when the look upon my face was clear before years of silent observation I unmoving, like my thoughts. I remember feeling my face wear away in the wind and the rain. My features smudged and soon disappeared. I hide within the rock never to emerge again. The rock is my prison and my heart’s sole protection. wind rain erosion I am a statue. I don't care if you're an old fart, because old people are smarter than me. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Oh i love this poem. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
I found this one in My Documents today when I was looking through my writing. I had forgotten about it, or thought it wasn't very good, but I like it right now.  I think its a little long, but that's okay.Kielo I don't care if you're an old fart, because old people are smarter than me. |
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PoetryIsLife 
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Kielo.  Enjoyed this piece. Quite sad... unemotional, yet emotional. Detached. I think you have something here; the meter falters a bit (if you were going for a certain flow). I like the beginning and ending, a lot, how you tie them intogether. I enjoyed it. Sincerely, Titus "A life unexamined is not worth living." |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
The heaviness of a weight... truly, we only burden ourselves with, but may be lightened in finding peace within... well done, Sir... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent writing! Very much enjoyed the feelings and images. ~Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
As I reflected on the messages imbedded in this piece, I saw the stoic heart...as experiences and life can harden and make impervious the very humanity that makes us... Well thought. ThisDiamond |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
Thank you all very much! I'm glad you all took something different from it. It makes me happy.Kielo I don't care if you're an old fart, because old people are smarter than me. |
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