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FuzzyFrazzledFraggle
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since 2002-09-20

Posts 155
Fraggle Rock

0 posted 2002-10-23 01:29 AM

Dear Broken Heart,

I've come a long way
Only to find myself again
Slipping on silver tears
Gripping onto vulnerable fears
I gasp for sanity
Through my sobs and
Outspoken naivite
I'm tired
As you can tell
By broken fantasies
And throwing my hopes
Down Love's wishing well
I know
I can not be like my sister; Cinderella
And I know
I can not be like my cousin; Gwynhefar
I wonder why
I am always the one
Left with you;
A broken heart
Left throbbing in the middle of the night
Leaving me with no sleep in sight
And even better yet
An unheathly contradictive appetite
For Prince Charming's affection
Yet instead
I lie here with an infectious fever
Burning through my veins
Traumatizing my heart
With fleeting thoughts
Of pain mixed with optimism
Perhaps even The Queen's Mirror was right
Maybe my heart is masochistic
Why else would I subject myself
To Love's humiliation...

Consider yourself fuzzed

[This message has been edited by FuzzyFrazzledFraggle (10-23-2002 01:42 AM).]

~K
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 104

1 posted 2002-10-23 01:55 AM

Why indeed...

I should be in bed myself but had to say this is beautiful first, & also The mirror never lies (or so I've been told)

Robert Adamson
Member

since 2002-10-21

Posts 328
PA/USA

2 posted 2002-10-23 03:14 AM

I like being frazzled. Thanks so much.

etoodog

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2002-10-23 08:48 AM

perhaps your heart is just something needing to be shared...and for that you will indeed suffer the indignities of trying to find love..the pain the hurt the humility it forces on you...

very nicely done....

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

4 posted 2002-10-23 04:28 PM

More dazzled than frazzled, enjoyed this piece alot, some wonderful lines. HUgs this a powerful and emotive read.

"Slipping on silver tears
Gripping onto vulnerable fears
I gasp for sanity
Through my sobs and
Outspoken naivite"

"I can not be like my sister; Cinderella
And I know
I can not be like my cousin; Gwynhefar
I wonder why
I am always the one
Left with you;
A broken heart
Left throbbing in the middle of the night"

"An unheathly contradictive appetite
For Prince Charming's affection
Yet instead
I lie here with an infectious fever"

The ladders of life that we scale merrily Move mysteriously around So that when you think you're climbing up, man In fact you're climbing down-Nick ca

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

5 posted 2002-10-23 04:30 PM

Now this way to well. I felt like this 3 times before Liam. Very well done.

Cold hands means a warm heart

majnu

Senior Member

since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

6 posted 2002-10-23 05:01 PM

i know how you feel. it sucks.

the poem is a bit trite i thought - but then i never was one to believe in children's tales.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

7 posted 2002-10-23 07:53 PM

Dear FFF ~

Oh, you write so well of the pain of a broken heart. You draw the reader into your shattered world to reveal the depths of
of your misery---an intimacy shared between writer and reader.

EA

rascalx
Senior Member

since 1999-08-25

Posts 590
Florence, SC, USA

8 posted 2002-10-24 02:27 AM

Wow! I so identify with the feelings in this piece! And the powerful imagery and the fairy tell metaphors fit your words perfectly! Well done! I especially love the lines:

Burning through my veins
Traumatizing my heart
With fleeting thoughts
Of pain mixed with optimism
Perhaps even The Queen's Mirror was right
Maybe my heart is masochistic
Why else would I subject myself
To Love's humiliation...

I hope you find your Prince Charming soon

still looking for Guenevere (lol)
- Jeff

"People say I should learn some self control; but I just want to exorcise my soul"

"I'm still waiting on a revelation here in Never-Never land..."

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

9 posted 2002-10-24 12:05 PM

I loved your heartfelt poem and Jeff's response too, as so often we keep in search of the "ideal". I guess with age you learn that has to change a bit, but I never hand out advise, life takes you there instead. Well done indeed and loved your metaphors in this poem.

Let there be peace on earth, and let it begin with me.

FuzzyFrazzledFraggle
Member

since 2002-09-20

Posts 155
Fraggle Rock

10 posted 2002-10-24 12:43 PM

I never do this, make an apperance but thank you all for your gracious replies, *Hugs* means alot..trust me..

Consider yourself fuzzed

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