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Temptress
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0 posted 2002-10-23 01:25 AM



what kind of tears would I cry
if I could tell you with a choked voice
that I just don't love you anymore
would you go through the rest of your world broken? I am thinking of putting pieces together
but I cannot be the adhesive that holds your heart together anymore.
I'm not strong enough
I'm not angelic enough.
I am different from the different person you kissed.
Could you love me the way I am now
disbelieving in love and every solid heartfelt thing?
The doubts take over our all too human hearts
and I've fallen again.
How many cracks does it take to get to the depths
to be perfectly shattered
and put on a wall with all the other heartbreak artwork.
I am lovely
yes
and you are loving me
but I am not the one in pictures anymore
more like a distant angel
again
trapped by sadness
caught between hope and pain and faith.
You trouble me still with wanting me back
and you lost me too long ago for me to remember myself then.
And I'm crying because love changed me
and I'm choking
because I can't get my final goodbye to voice itself
in the perfect strenght tone.


"two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light
a duet done with passion"

excerpt from "I Love You"

© Copyright 2002 Jennifer - All Rights Reserved
FuzzyFrazzledFraggle
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1 posted 2002-10-23 01:38 AM


mind if I email this to my ex boyfriend!? maybe your poem would help him understand how hard it is for me to tell him that I can't be the adhesive to his heart anymore...

Consider yourself fuzzed

[This message has been edited by FuzzyFrazzledFraggle (10-23-2002 01:38 AM).]

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2 posted 2002-10-23 01:53 AM


I could use some person glue. Or maybe just some person.  

Glad to see you're writing again.

I think I'm going to go talk with Hannah for a bit.

RSWells
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3 posted 2002-10-23 07:43 AM


Tension without pretension and generously blaming oneself. Wow what a women.
Moonlight Romeo
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4 posted 2002-10-23 08:38 AM


If only it were so easy.  Sometimes, the other does not want to see that we have moved and that they have stayed.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks?  It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

Kielo
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5 posted 2002-10-24 12:08 PM


Truly wonderful. I'll keep my personal opinion to myself, because the way I voice it, it would offend half the people on the site, and I know it's biased. Anyway, I really enjoyed the poem. Thank you.

Kielo

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-Me. (reply in the Alley)

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6 posted 2002-10-24 11:41 AM


Heartbreak artwork, definitely...
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7 posted 2002-10-24 08:12 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Jennifer, my heart goes out to you, sweet friend, I know this feeling and wish for the right adhesives to secure those creases in your heart and you can find the nerve to say goodbye then find the true heart that will console you! (sigh) My thoughts are with you, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jennifer, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

garysgirl
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8 posted 2002-10-24 08:21 PM


Jennifer, this is so beautiful and a very good work. And, I believe it was written from the heart. Thanks so much for sharing this with us.


Love To All,
Ethel

Aenimal
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9 posted 2002-11-23 02:08 AM


Heartfelt and painful. I'm seldom moved to tears but this poem brings back memories i thought were laid to rest. I wish I'd had these words as guidance years ago. Beautiful work as always.

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (11-23-2002 02:09 AM).]

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