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~K
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 104

0 posted 2002-10-19 01:10 PM

In the ever present
absence of soul shattering
inspiration, I reinvisioned
the diadem of acceptable behavior
& set sail for aberrant shores
where winds whisper gossamer secrets
of kingdoms long thought abandoned
still thriving in the after thoughts
of loves nomadic spirit.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

1 posted 2002-10-19 01:32 PM

Ooooooh! This is soooooo goooood!

Welcome to Passions! You are off to a great start with this one!

Earth Angel

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

2 posted 2002-10-19 01:50 PM

it's a lovely poem

if you want something more secific in the area of critique, let me know, what's on my heart is purely bias, so may not be worthwhile to others

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

~K
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 104

3 posted 2002-10-19 01:55 PM

thank you both so much! I appreciate all responses...from the heart is good!Ü

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2002-10-20 03:22 PM

~K
Welcome to the wonderful circle of friendship~

This is just truly lovely~

'where winds whisper gossamer secrets
of kingdoms long thought abandoned
still thriving in the after thoughts
of loves nomadic spirit.'

I am particularly fond of -
'where winds whisper gossamer secrets

Gives the imagery of 'half-hidden' secrets behind a veil ... waiting to be shared~
Very, very nicely done~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2002-10-20 04:16 PM

Welcome...and this is SO lovely...
Much enjoyed.
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
So you won't ever forget me ~

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

6 posted 2002-10-20 04:40 PM

Yes, welcome. What imagination!
Terrific poem; enjoyed greatly.

Thanks,
Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

~K
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 104

7 posted 2002-10-20 05:03 PM

You are all so nice I am just blown away! I found this place because I was hanging out at litkicks & someone was bashing this site!(I will go back & set them straight) My poetry rarely inspired responses over there so I was not expecting all this love! But it is VERY nice...I feel like I've come home at last!(now it's time to read all your poetry!)

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

8 posted 2002-10-20 06:46 PM

~K
You will find this place to be the friendliest poetry site on the entire Internet~

We are happy to have you here~

Hope you'll browse around all the forums and continue to share with us~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

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