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Wind
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0 posted 2002-10-19 09:36 AM


I am returned
To the city of lights
With colors,
Moving so fast-
Like a movie

The stores by the street
are bursting with life
and I watch the people
pass swiftly by
and I stand by the road
And wonder why I'm here

And the Music plays-
Why am I so cold,
So scared
I have heard this song before

The little blurs
of racing cars
dart past me like bullets
and I wander through the streets
serching for a reason to be here

And the Music plays-
Why am I so cold,
So scared
I have heard this song before

In a world of hate,
A world of trash
I sit on a bench
And wait-
To be lifted away
From the city of lights

~Wind~
      
I am sorry. Somehow my sequel to the original poem got deleted and replaced by the old poem and I was devistated because I  had worked so hard on it and didn't write it down. I had better not do that again! This it what I could remember.


[This message has been edited by Wind (10-19-2002 05:49 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-10-19 04:33 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Liz, I'm sorry to hear the original part of this series disappeared, my heart goes out to you and indeed the world is filled with woe but there sill exists hope and if you follow your heart you will find the light shine upon your special place of peace! (sigh) This is heartfelt, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Liz, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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2 posted 2002-10-19 05:05 PM


This is a good poem.

Cold hands means a warm heart

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3 posted 2002-10-19 07:52 PM


Wonderful follow-up to the original... you've persisted with just enough themes to keep this separate from the first, but still connected to it in many senses...

Especially the formatting, which I love most about this poem... it seems you've kicked up the intensity of this installation just a notch, to make it a bit darker... which is ironic in a "city of lights."  

Nicely written.  I'm off to read the last one.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

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