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Moonlight Romeo
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The heart of you

0 posted 2002-10-18 04:08 PM


A poet in love,
Inspired by the moon,
Writes his heart's dreams
In bold strokes
Of comet tails
Across a brown-eyed sky
Whose stars twinkle in delight
At his art.

A poet in love,
Warmed by those rays,
Weaves his soul's desires
In finest thread
Of crystal light
Around an auburn tapestry
Whose pattern breathes again
At his touch.

A poet in love,
In love with his moon,
Shows that love every day
In these words
Of his heart.
Making her face smile,
Bringing peace to her life
With his love.


What light through yon window breaks?  It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

[This message has been edited by Moonlight Romeo (10-18-2002 04:08 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-10-18 04:13 PM


Very very beautifully penned dear Romeo.
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

Munda
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2 posted 2002-10-18 05:24 PM


Wow... great poem.
majnu
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3 posted 2002-10-18 05:35 PM


i found this to be a bit trite. the usage of the moon is so overdone that its hurts a cool idea. you can obviously work magic witht the words, maybe metaphor selection needs a bit of help
the_loner_23
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4 posted 2002-10-18 05:55 PM


Beautiful poem

Cold hands means a warm heart

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5 posted 2002-10-18 05:59 PM


Lucky both. I seem to recall such memories....but all too brief. Enjoyed
Kethry
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6 posted 2002-10-18 07:18 PM


Romeo,
if you are a poet in love it shows - I would come to you by moonlight to hear these words.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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7 posted 2002-10-18 07:23 PM


Romeo I want you to know that you inspired me. i am in love right now.. and now i think i must write something about it. thank you
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8 posted 2002-10-18 08:46 PM




(sigh) Awwwwwwwww, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, and may you always give her true happiness as your heart shines with its purity looking so good in love! (big hugggssssss) This is a gem, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Romeo, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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9 posted 2002-10-18 08:48 PM


Oh yes, Romeo...when someone's in love, how can the help but write about....or sing about it....or shout over the internet about........I   LOVE  being in love with my wonderful Gary.

Love To All,
Ethel....garysgirl

Moonlight Romeo
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10 posted 2002-10-21 05:19 PM


Thank you all for your responses.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks?  It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

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11 posted 2002-11-04 12:06 PM


How did this one escape me, Love? I've read it, but I didn't reply until now. Apologies.

"My ears have not yet drunk a hundred words
Of that tongue’s uttering, yet I know the sound:" "Romeo and Juliet"

Moonlight Romeo
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12 posted 2002-11-04 08:46 AM


No apologies needed Dear One, you know what's in my heart.



Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks?  It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

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13 posted 2002-11-04 09:12 AM



A poet, who is embraced in a love like this,
has much to offer...
enjoyed this very much...

Earth Angel
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14 posted 2002-11-04 07:03 PM


Romeo, Romeo, thou art one of PIP's fine romantic romeos!

EA

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15 posted 2002-11-04 07:49 PM


This may sound stupid to you guys, but the name of this poem is really good.. Itts a name that makes you want to come and read the poem.. So, i guess i have to thank you for giving your poem a good name, because if youdidnt i wouldnt have read your beutifull words...

I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait.

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