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Negative Reality |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Negative Reality When mentor winds caress my face I am lost in a gentle place. A place of awe a place of store A place of phantoms living core A place that opens up a path A place that soothes me like a bath A place that baths my angers reap Placing hazards soft asleep It is a gentle part of me A negative reality A place of seem, a place of dream A place of daffodils that gleam Though lilies overtake the field I make some daffodils still yield. And thought they are of misty art Yet still they are in fact a part. And long as life sweeps through a vein So long shall dreams in me remain. [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (10-18-2002 08:21 AM).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
The last two lines will be immortal in my soul. Very beautiful and the ending, WOW! Liz |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
And may you continue to send us your dreams in such expressive poems, Sy... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sy, very nice except I think your sooth needs and "e" Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Thank you for the lovely comment. I hope you are well. Love Sy scorpio, Thank you so much. Kethry Took care of it, thank you. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"And long as life sweeps through a vein So long shall dreams in me remain." Beautiful Sy!!! Love this...ooooh yes!! ~Morning hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Enchantress You are the sweetest,  |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Though lilies overtake the field I make some daffodils still yield Seymour - though I have been warned not to type due to tendonitis in my left arm, I just had to tell you how lovely this morning offering is. Thankyou for this softness. hugs, Chris  Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
"so long shall dreams..." Marvelous line among many! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Good morning, Mr. T.! In days of yore On distant shore Dwelled Shakespeare The sonneteer But here across The shining sea We have our own --our Mr. T.! EA |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
And with your words, opens a door For aching souls and hearts so sore To find relief within your world... Seymour, this work's another pearl! Your negative reality Describes a place I'd like to be. *S* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Chris, Thank you and bless you my dear. VAS, Thank you sweet. Earth Angel Thank you so much.  suthern All people have it you just have to develop it. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssss) Oh Seymour, this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, always let those daffodils trumpet out the ballads of life to your heart and fill your heart with ease and peace! (sigh) This is beautifully tranquil, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy "It is a gentle part of me A negative reality A place of seem, a place of dream A place of daffodils that gleam" My flower and soil may differ but in my place I feel the same  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
When mentor winds caress my face I am lost in a gentle place. A place of awe a place of store A place of phantoms living core A place that opens up a path A place that soothes me like a bath A place that baths my angers reap Placing hazards soft asleep =========================================== all those thing written above...is what your poetry does for me  When mentor winds caress my face thats you me Stinkylove...your rhymes are my breeze of ease. *ww* did you get the pics and note I sent to the new email a couple days ago? just checking to see if all is working now? Unknown to us, there are moments when crevices open for time to come alive with begining. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Mr. Seymour, dear heart, I hope that "life sweeps through a vein" for many, many years to come. For, "So long shall dreams in me remain"....maybe you will see fit to share those marvelous dreams with all of your "family of friends" here at Passions In Poetry. I certainly do hope so. Love To All, Ethel |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
The last stanza tied this together perfectly! Excellent Seymour! ~Sheri |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Noah, You always have a gracious reply. Martie Yes each has their own place. JM, Yes I did get your picture in the sand and thank you. Your letter was wonderful to read and I will try and write you tonight. WWRS Ethel, I will try and thank you for the beautiful reply. Irie Thank you so much for the excellent. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymour darling heart This is utterly utterly wonderful When I think you have reached the peak of your perfection you then write something that is so perfect and full of beauty I find myself saying this is sighhhhhhhh. As always darling heart your writing is tres tres bon. You of course know I adore this don’t you? Mmmmm I do! Thank you for this true delight, as you can see I’m home and feel like I want to rush back to the U.S. post haste. I will one day I promise.  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marsha, Happy to read you are home and well. Time goes very fast sometimes. Thanks for the read and kind comments. |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Sey, I thoroughly enjoyed the internal rhyming scheme of this, as well as the picture of living on the other side of the fence of reality: where dreams come alive, and the spirit can delve into fantasy. Jeff |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Ah, THAT kind of negative reality! A very interesting perspetive, Sey! Cor |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ShadowRider, Thank you for the read and understanding. Cor, Oh yes, that kind of negative reality! Thank you for the read. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Another perfect write, Sy... I especially loved the last 2 lines  ~ chipmunk hugs from MichiganLyra |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lyra, Thank you so much for the read and sweet comment. I hope things ae going well with you. |
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