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Street Poet
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since 2002-07-07
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0 posted 2002-10-17 04:44 PM


Describe Her:

She smells like flowers on a spring afternoon
Like a rose from the concrete I'm waiting on our love to bloom
She was everything I could ask for and more
I really never had girl tell me she loved me before
Siting here in amazement at her classy style
I like to get inside her mind as we talk for a while
When I'm tired I look to her for power
While I'm in the bathroom
I stare at her heavenly curves while she's in the shower
Saying to myself she's all mine
What have I done to deserve beauty of this kind
She's sophisticated but simple at the same time
Always on my mind that's why I had to freestyle this rhyme
It's like I know when she around as if I had a spidey sense
Rubbing her soft shoulders when she becomes tense
The only word to describe her is lovely
And I'm glad that she's loving me
With all her heart
I should've known this was love from the start
Because like old paintings
Our love gets more valuable over time like a work of art



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Martie
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1 posted 2002-10-17 07:11 PM


Street Poet

Sounds like love to me.  Well done!

Krishankins
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2 posted 2002-10-17 07:17 PM


ooh! DEFINITELY sounds like love! I like the way you compared this love to art. Nice!!!

Kris

Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!?

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