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wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2002-10-17 02:27 PM

I once took a photo

Of my love
Alone in bed.
Atop the bedclothes

Facing away from me,
Curled like a lazy G.
Her nakedness glowing.

When she roused
And left the room

I took another

Of where she had just been,
The impression of her body
Was still where she’d lain.

And printed these images
Together

To make a beautiful
Matte finished,
Sepia toned
Photograph

Of a woman,
No longer there

Of a heart,
Breaking.

~wranx

In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward".

~wranx~

WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23

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somebody's dungeon

1 posted 2002-10-17 02:29 PM

Oh this is sad, dear wranx. You write this well, and with such beauty.

and, love the pic

1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

2 posted 2002-10-17 02:31 PM

sad sad sad

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

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3 posted 2002-10-17 02:33 PM

love the piece..both from an image and an idea.... you weave it together seamlessly..and let the break tell itself by the absence of intimate... only the form in memory captured...

always a pleasure...and I know they will always be good....

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2002-10-17 02:36 PM

a photo of a photo of a memory before the loss...

smiling...you should be careful yanno, ye make magick unknowingly!

I'm keeping this one Ed...sepia IS a powerful medium.

wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

5 posted 2002-10-17 02:38 PM

Thanks Anne, aw shucks!

Helen, it's sad no longer. A memory cherished.

Ron, my friend, I truly appreciate your reading my work, and the comments. I know that you are on my side in this....journey

Ed

serenity blaze
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6 posted 2002-10-17 02:38 PM

sigh...it would help to KEEP something, when I say I'm gonna, huh...sort of like taking a picture with the lens cap still on...sigh..

click into library*

and love the pic of YOU too...I would love to see more of your work. s-c-a-n-n-e-r?

Martie

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7 posted 2002-10-17 02:40 PM

wranx

so simply to show the path of love to ache. An artist's ability.

wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

8 posted 2002-10-17 02:43 PM

You snuck in on me witch, as I was responding.
Yes, it seems so, the unintentional making of Magick.

Ed

Cpat Hair

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9 posted 2002-10-18 11:06 AM

had to revisit this....

the image double printed... a ghost where once was a heart... Ser is right... one does create magic in ways such as this..

imagery intrigues me....

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light

10 posted 2002-10-18 01:22 PM

So that's what you look like! You've been holding out on us! Now your poetry will be even more enjoyable to read!

This is a poetic jewel you have written.

It 'sepias' into my thoughts...

Linda

[This message has been edited by Earth Angel (10-18-2002 08:07 PM).]

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

11 posted 2002-10-18 01:26 PM

Oh.....yes!

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

12 posted 2002-10-19 01:43 AM

Good form, nice picture, outstanding poem... very~

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

13 posted 2002-10-19 01:52 AM

I love this - it's a portrait of a memory. Something unusual and different. Glad I found it.

brian sites
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since 2002-06-25

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usa

14 posted 2002-10-19 01:53 AM

ahhhh
damn

you got to stop writing this good......

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

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15 posted 2002-10-19 09:16 AM

So creative and innovative; just love it! Thanks for sharing your talent with us.

With warm regards,

Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08

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16 posted 2002-10-19 09:20 AM

The image will always remain in your eye
The love in your heart
Very unique and lovely poem
Liz

WhileIWasGone
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17 posted 2002-10-19 10:25 AM

Beautiful....Hugs

H.

Alicia
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18 posted 2002-10-19 11:13 AM

~Oh, this has me, the words, the idea. *Peace.

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

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19 posted 2002-10-19 11:25 AM

Ed, this is really beautiful and unique. I love it. I've only been here less than a month, so I haven't read you before, I don't think. I'm going to look up some more of your poetry when I get back from town. I loved this. I was glad to read in your reply that this is a good 'memory", now. Thanks for sharing.
Love To All,
Ethel

Midnitesun

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Gaia

20 posted 2002-10-19 12:06 PM

Sometimes, I too cherish ghosty memories.

VAS
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21 posted 2002-10-19 12:35 PM

fantastically woven!

and that 2nd photo, priceless in its interpretation of its impression

truly a heart-breaker

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

caterina
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since 2002-07-25

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22 posted 2002-10-20 05:01 PM

Wow, what a poem! I was going along reading this in a nice flow and then whammo... that ending was unexpected. This was great!

I really enjoy your poems.

Thanks

caterina

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

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23 posted 2002-10-20 05:31 PM

Excellent writing Ed and so much power in the words. I am glad that it has become a cherished memory for you. So very well done!

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

24 posted 2002-10-20 09:25 PM

Well, this is rather stunning.
This has been collecting dust on my hard drive for months.

Thanks to all, for the overwhelming response.

~Ed

bsquirrel

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25 posted 2002-10-21 02:42 PM

Ed, I loved the next-to-last stanza.

Making the last stanza feeling anticlimactic.

Is that what you intended? The going
and the leaving?

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

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26 posted 2002-10-21 03:00 PM

chanced on serentity's tribute to you, and had to look up a poem by you...what a poem I picked to read...this is incredible...really nice writing

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

27 posted 2002-10-21 04:28 PM

Dang! This...You...Amazing!!

Madame Chipmunk
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28 posted 2002-10-21 04:49 PM

Please add my response to this list, Ed...
I love the photo of the memory...
this is just too tooo good!
And now I know what you look like too!

~ chipmunk hugs on film

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Dark Angel
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29 posted 2002-10-21 05:54 PM

oh this is great! absolutely....

adding to my library

Maree

Tara Simms Hall
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30 posted 2002-10-23 10:43 AM

I've never read your work before today. Now, I think I will need to search for more of it. Your writing is addictive.

The starkness of this poem completely captures heartbreak. Short, simple lines usually say it best. Bravo!

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

31 posted 2002-10-23 10:50 AM

a very touching and telling write, Ed.

Thanks for sharing yourself with us.

M

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