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Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

0 posted 2002-10-17 12:52 PM

(just an interesting write that came when I channeled some jealous feelings today into something useful..like poetry)

should have never tried your heart with my love
because you were never mine to have.
You danced here
danced in naked
love in tiny flecks clinging to your face
sparkling with truth in the cupped hands of light
birthed to flashing
while your heart smiled at me from its best angles.
(hiding the more awkward ones)
We were turning there
pressed into intense moments
squandering a fortune of forevers
in too many moments of lust.
should have never tried your heart with my love
because you were never really here.
a dance shown by a ghost of a man who used to be
and you summoned that naked spirit long enough to pull my will into an aggressive addiction.
those love flecks stil sparkle in my forgiving smile
but I no longer know the boundaries
between the world of your ghosts
and the world of your new man.

"two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light
a duet done with passion"

excerpt from "I Love You"

Moonlight Romeo

Senior Member

since 2001-09-10

Posts 982
The heart of you

1 posted 2002-10-17 01:02 PM

There is a great difference between never being here and being always in the heart. For the heart speaks in truth, and not in false.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

Opoetry4me
Member

since 2002-10-11

Posts 126
Dixon, Ky USA

2 posted 2002-10-17 01:03 PM

I have been there myself.It's hard to break loose from lust as well as love.Excellent write.

Opoetry4me

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

3 posted 2002-10-17 01:12 PM

Very nicely done. You ponder well.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2002-10-17 01:48 PM

Temptress
A very good write, enjoyed the read.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

5 posted 2002-10-17 01:56 PM

between the world of your ghosts
and the world of your new man.

Geez Jen........this hits home. It's like the Jekyle/Hide syndrome. Well done hon.

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

6 posted 2002-10-17 02:00 PM

Jennifer, I loved the way you put those jealous feelings into poetry. I've had a lot of those jealous feelings towards my Gary. I imagine he wishes that I would put more of them into poetry, too. Thanks for sharing your poetry with us.
Love To All,
Ethel

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

7 posted 2002-10-17 03:54 PM

You conjure new ghosts
out of lover's flecks.

Smoky as the rain.

rascalx
Senior Member

since 1999-08-25

Posts 590
Florence, SC, USA

8 posted 2002-10-18 12:58 PM

    "a dance shown by a ghost of a man who used to be"

   "but I no longer know the boundaries
between the world of your ghosts
and the world of your new man."
---------------------------------------------

    The whole poem speaks volumes to me and I especially love the image of "flecks" but the words I quoted above are what ring so true... (given my own personal situation, that is

) Beautifully done, my ever tempting one
- Jeff

Alicia
Member

since 2002-03-22

Posts 279

9 posted 2002-10-18 09:04 AM

~Jenn, and what a good thing to do with those feelings, look what you've created, look at the honesty in this, the understanding come to,...enjoyed reading you. *Peace.

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