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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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The fool walks on to solid ground-- but that's what happens when fool thinks. The fool too late has realized how quickly sand can sink. Echoes from behind the leaves encourage in thin veil deceit-- admonishment and cries of "swim!" grasping for an edge again after cursing walk of brink. "too late, too late" mocks motion's rock the pant of breath be mere tick tock of shadows in a slow sun's set long arms reach for what is yet to be embraced to touch the face-- complacent--sinking in regret. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
My my Karen, how very zen of you...will there be exercises to follow??? ~grin~ Good work...nice to read at midnight...  K |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Enjoyed this Gloom |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssss) Oh Karen, this is so very true and it is sad to see so many when they least expect it sink further in their own shame and misunderstanding! (sad sigh) You speak of this albatross so well, sweet friend, I love it, my thoughts are with them all, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
The fool walks on to solid ground-- but that's what happens when fool thinks (chuckling) Love the first lines... an excellent device to switcht he reader from the expected to the realm of what next... Yes... I do agree...quite Zen of you.... |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
"grasping for an edge again after cursing walk of brink" Love this! |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
I liked this very much. Total bottoming out; spiritual growth, sufficatingly difficult. Warmly, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, All true, a very good write, enjoyed. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"too late, too late" mocks motion's rock the pant of breath be mere tick tock" I loved the rhythm and flow in this Karen ... the lines above are just perfect ... wonderful to read aloud! Really enjoyed this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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