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Open Poetry #23

The Giver of Wealth

majnu

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since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

0 posted 2002-10-16 10:28 PM

Round and round a merry-go-round
Of concrete columns and asphalt floors
My steed circles past others
Red, green blue, BMW, manufacturing colors,
To the top of the stable, straight
Above others alike, where the
Roof is the sky and the lights the sun.

The sun, the sun, I face my beast to the
East; above, the height looks down to me
And above him still stands the sun,
A pure flame atop a candle of dark green wax.

But in a crisp February morn the
Light is cold, though the giver bright,
Soft gold rains down upon the poor,
But to no avail, few look up to the cure
For their banal days and passionless
Night; the sun, the sun, in the morn
Look to the East, the giver of wealth wakes early.

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2002-10-16 10:33 PM

Awesome write

Cold hands means a warm heart

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

2 posted 2002-10-17 11:33 AM

This is great. You touched on so many aspects of life, I don't know where to start if I wanted to point out any one favorite line. So, I'll just re-read and enjoy it again.

Thank You,
Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

3 posted 2002-10-17 12:22 PM

Giving this a bump so that it may be read. I read a lot in it..perhaps I over analyzed, but I enjoyed it, and I think others would too.

"two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light
a duet done with passion"

excerpt from "I Love You"

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

4 posted 2002-10-17 12:45 PM

I agree with all the others. This is filled to overflowing and I wouldn't know where to begin to comment on any certain thing. It is splendid

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

5 posted 2002-10-17 01:24 PM

majnu, enjoyed this read on empty consumerism.

El riesgo vive siempre!

majnu

Senior Member

since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

6 posted 2002-10-17 04:46 PM

reply thank you all for the compliments.

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