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Effigy
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cool air
blowing
whispering
in my ear
come to me

gently calling out
beckoning
longing
from distance unseen
come to me

night time caress
rustling my hair
hands on shoulder
fingers on back of neck
come to me

empty
rooms
spaces
alone
come to me

where



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cool, but i dislike the last stanza - you did not earn a list of words read with profundity. you have to use puncuation here to get your point across.
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.?!
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But Profundity doesn't gargle blue words on hats when punctuation needs three times.

I believe the most important component of a poem is rhythm. Rhythm is the heartbeat of a poem. It is what makes poetry poetry.

 
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