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pure_innocence
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0 posted 2002-10-16 01:11 PM



Don’t know where I’m going
Just know I can’t stay here
Don’t know who I’ll find,
But I won’t cry another tear

Caught here in this chaos,
It’s whirling all around
But I stand in this calm
There’s no one else around

It’s like they can’t get in,
Even if I asked them too,
And I really need someone with me,
I’m crying out to you

Can you hear this bitter heart,
Screaming in it’s void,
Please hear and rescue me,
Before I’ve been destroyed,

I always say I never cry,
But what I really want to know,
Is if I cry would you hold me –
and not just watch me go

Is it okay if I’m scared,
Is it okay if I’m wrong
Could you still be there for me,
Even if I can’t be strong?

Cause I need something to hold on to,
Before I spin out of control,
Though I’ve brought it all upon my self,
I need someone to save my soul,

I can’t change my mistakes,
But I can learn from them and move on,
I want someone to help me,
To find me before I’m gone,

So hold me please,
Tightly – with everything you’ve got,
Save me from hurting myself,
From becoming someone I’m not,

So if I cry would you hold me,
And not think that I am weak,
If I fall would you help me up,
If I’m silent would you urge me to speak?
I’m falling away from the world,
And there’s no one to pull me back in,
I’m dying I’m crying, I’m trying,
Wanting so much to let somebody in.

I’m falling away from the world,
Thinkin bout takin the easy way out,
I need you to hurry and love me,
To remind me what living and loving’s about.

© Copyright 2002 Jamie Lynne - All Rights Reserved
the_loner_23
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1 posted 2002-10-16 01:11 PM


I think this is a good poem. A lot of feeling expressed.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Paul Wilson
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2 posted 2002-10-23 10:09 PM


pure innocence~ I really felt your emotion pouring out of each word and line. Sometime we just need someone to call friend. If you need a friend I will be your friend...Paul
FuzzyFrazzledFraggle
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3 posted 2002-10-23 11:37 PM


I too feel the emotion in this..you can always call on me if you need a friend..it's the least I can do..

Consider yourself fuzzed

Lone Wolf
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4 posted 2002-10-27 04:28 PM


Good write, full of emotion.  Nice work.  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

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5 posted 2002-10-27 05:17 PM


"I always say I never cry,
But what I really want to know,
Is if I cry would you hold me –
and not just watch me go"

~~~~

"I can’t change my mistakes,
But I can learn from them and move on,
I want someone to help me,
To find me before I’m gone,"


very emotional, heart touching...
excellent writing

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6 posted 2002-10-27 08:07 PM


J ...*S*...

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7 posted 2002-10-27 08:15 PM


pure_innocence, this is a very well written poem.....so much emotion was felt. If it's you who you're talking abou in this poem, I hope you're feeling better now. Thanks for sharing your poem.


Love To All,
Ethel

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