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Mistletoe Angel
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0 posted 2002-10-16 11:27 AM


Disease
By: Noah Eaton
10/16/02

Everyday I wander through your candy store
Seeing your pretty face behind the counter
You treat me right and filled my boyish delight
Not it all seems to taste so sour

Today I visited your candy store
And you boarded up all my windows and the door
You made one last gance then I saw my world in tritantopia
Feeling like I don't belong to you anymore

If I'm going to be ill at least let it be the mumps and measles
But I'm struck by this malaria of confusion and troubles
I don't want to let you go, sweetie

Your love that used to shine here
Has now vanished and turned into a cancer
My veins are in hemorrhage and are going purple
How am I supposed to fight this smallpox?
All the chocolate in the world can't save me
My heart is being shredded by these diabetes
I'm cursed by this disease...

All I want is to be faithful to you. see your sweet smile
Now everything seems so tragic
It feels like you're giving yourself away
And the love you had for me is so nostalgic

I've tried all of these vaccines
But none can cure this grief
I don't want to let you go, sweetie

Your love that used to shine here
Has now vanished and turned into a cancer
My veins are in hemorrhage and are going purple
How am I supposed to fight this smallpox?
All the chocolate in the world can't save me
My heart is being shredded by these diabetes
I'm cursed by this disease
And everyday before you said you loved me
I love you beyond your wildest imagining
Please don't deny what my heart cries
I need your heart close to my side
To God I pray our love can go on and last
That this dilemma will move on and pass
And I'll conquer this disease...

Almost every day I wish I was bedridden
I stare at your pictures every minute
Your green eyes are the ones I want to gaze into lovingly
I don't want you to leave...

Your love that used to shine here
Has now vanished and turned into a cancer
My veins are in hemorrhage and are going purple
How am I supposed to fight this smallpox?
All the chocolate in the world can't save me
My heart is being shredded by these diabetes
I'm cursed by this disease
And everyday before you said you loved me
I love you beyond your wildest imagining
Please don't deny what my heart cries
I need your heart close to my side
To God I pray our love can go on and last
That this dilemma will move on and pass
And I'll conquer this disease...
My plagued heart is bleeding
My plagued heart is bleeding
My plagued heart is bleeding
My plagued heart is bleeding...




"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (10-16-2002 11:27 AM).]

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1slick_lady
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1 posted 2002-10-16 11:32 AM


noah...i am sorry your heart is hurting...helen

[This message has been edited by 1slick_lady (10-16-2002 11:34 AM).]

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2 posted 2002-10-16 11:33 AM


HUGS.....

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

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3 posted 2002-10-16 11:36 AM



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4 posted 2002-10-16 11:43 AM


Even through my sadness, for your apparent sadness, I can still appreciate the brilliance of your writing---the analogies, the metaphors....the list goes on!

~ Sending you extra BIG HUGS this morning! ~

Linda

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5 posted 2002-10-16 11:49 AM


Oh Noah, I am feeling sick for you and your sadness overwhelms me.

Where is that beautiful smile? I hope it returns soon and this awful disease disappears.  

Hugs, Marti

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6 posted 2002-10-16 11:54 AM


Noah,

I am sooo sorry to see you hurting. Please contact me anytime you need to talk. This is a very good poem.

                      Dawn

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7 posted 2002-10-16 11:56 AM


Noah...I feel your pain so deeply expressed here...nothing hurts or inspires quite like a heart in anguish... I wish I could take you out for a beer to help ease your pain..

...believe what your heart feels...

Irie
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8 posted 2002-10-16 11:57 AM


As the saying goes, "Love can conquer anything".
I hope this proves to be true! Hugs


~Sheri

"Don't wait for your ship to come in ...
Swim out to it"

[This message has been edited by Irie (10-16-2002 12:02 PM).]

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9 posted 2002-10-16 06:23 PM


This is so sad. (hugs)

Cold hands means a warm heart

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10 posted 2002-10-16 06:34 PM


Oh Noah, I hope that you aren't hurting and that your poem is just a peom, but so many of your work is sad poetry about love. Vacines may not help, but hugs and kisses can and I sent them to you (Hugs and kisses)

~Wind~

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11 posted 2002-10-16 10:41 PM


thanks  J

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12 posted 2002-10-16 11:42 PM


Noah - I'm sadden by your poem. I can only pray that this isn't what it seems to be...

BC

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13 posted 2002-10-17 02:26 AM


I'm sorry you feel this way, Noah..

Consider yourself fuzzed

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14 posted 2002-10-17 02:37 AM


Noah, this is  SOOOOOO  heartbreaking. You are such a good poet and can express yourself so well that I can tell when you're smiling.......or when you're crying. From this poem, in my mind's eye I see you crying. And it hurts me just like it does all of your  "family of friends". Dear sweet Noah, cheer up, dear friend.....we need your sweet smiles back. Things with Joanna have just  GOT  to get better. Good luck, sweet Noah.
With Love To All,
Ethel

P.S. Notice that I'm using your favorite color!!!!

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (10-17-2002 02:39 AM).]

Larry C
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15 posted 2002-10-17 02:46 AM


Noah,
What an excellent write. Peace and courage to you.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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16 posted 2002-10-17 09:59 AM


enjoyed
Kit McCallum
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17 posted 2002-10-17 10:04 AM


Such an incredibly emotive piece Noah ... you've captured a pain and expressed the depth through words, in a way that all can understand and feel. Heart hugs to you for this tender piece.

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit

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18 posted 2002-10-17 10:06 AM


Noah,
Don't worry the whale will eventually let you go. Enjoyed the write.

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19 posted 2002-10-19 02:14 PM



VAS
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20 posted 2002-10-19 03:05 PM


excellent analogies of being denied something heretofore wonderfully sweet

I too hope it's just a poem, and not your current reality

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

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21 posted 2002-10-19 04:20 PM


Oh Noah! I am so sorry you are feeling so much pain and sadness. Hugs to you my friend.
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22 posted 2002-10-19 05:06 PM


*cries*
OMG, Noah, thanks so much for posting this... I'm feeling exactly like that right now. I hope that things start to look up for you soon; no one deserves to feel like this.

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23 posted 2002-10-19 05:57 PM


Dear Sweet Noah,

If this is a recent account of a present state of mind to you I say:

On bended knee I sit by your side
I tell you that your pain will leave
knowing that your heart refuses to let go.
We all understand this rejection. There is no one who has not been there in the place where you retreat.

You, Noah, so giving and open will find yourself again. For the moment let your pain
be rolled up into a little ball and tossed into the mighty ocean. Let your friends comfort you so as you have been a comfort to them. But, most of all know that you are loved by many and will find what you are looking for.


SG

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24 posted 2002-10-19 08:14 PM


Hope things are well Noah...James
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