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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Change I tinker with a tinker’s pen Into the misty now and then And play the game of who am I And only hear the echoes cry. They rebound in the dark of night Never bright a spark of light Soundless in the winds that blow It seems to whisper I don’t know. Which really makes me roar the more A spirit caged in earthly store Locked in gravity and air Is almost more then I can bear. I havoc with the God of change With no defense I can arrange And burn my wick into an ash To join the generation’s cache. I only know I am the dust That change must use to readjust. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I tinker with a tinker’s pen Into the misty now and then And play the game of who am I And only hear the echoes cry. good stuff Sy... enjoyed the whole, but the openinglines in a nutshell say a lot to me... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"I only know I am the dust That change must use to readjust." --------------------------------------------- Morning Sy! If you only knew what your morning write means to me... How you manage to do this every morning is beyond me.. but please never stop!  I love the way your closing couplet is always so powerful and full of wisdom. Sort of wraps everything up in closing. Don't you ever stop writing...ever. I enjoy my morning read by Sy, with my tea. ~Morning hugs, Nancy~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I agree with Cpat... the entire poem is fantastic... but that first verse is simply incredible! *S* And play the game of who am I And only hear the echoes cry. I think you've been peeking in my diary, Seymour. *S* I just never could have phrased it so well! *S* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I havoc with the God of change With no defense I can arrange And burn my wick into an ash To join the generation's cache. I only know I am the dust That change must use to readjust. ========================================== if youre dust then it glitters with gold... and could this poem be any cooler???? generation's cache only you could come up with that metaphor.  When your pen tinkers we reap the rhymed rewards. got the email..will be in touch  winkiewinkie    Unknown to us, there are moments when crevices open for time to come alive with begining. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Good morning, dear Mr. T.! The one thing that I hope will never change is---YOU! EA |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Sitting here grinning for I can completely relate. As ever, thanking you for telling me more about myself in your wonderful poetry. With Warm Regards, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Mr. Seymour, I'm glad that you had a poem on the first page so I could read it before I get ready to go spend the day with my parents. Your work was marvelous, as always. Thanks for sharing. With Love To All, Ethel |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Cpat echo here!!!!! Love that first stanza the most, but it's a great piece. The verse that begins with "I havoc..." is quite fine, like the entire poem, but my mind wants to read "In havoc..." It's hard for me to see "havoc" as a gerund. If I'm all wet and it can be used as a verb as well as a noun, just let me know." I often turn nouns, that are not gerunds, into verbs, so if that's entirely what you're doing, just say "Bug off!" LOL Though "In havoc with..." fits so well, in my thinking, that the poetic license isn't needed. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Which really makes me roar the more A spirit caged in earthly store Locked in gravity and air Is almost more then I can bear. Your words have universal appeal Sy. And this a perfect example. Enjoyed |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy Your poetry is not contained in simple thought or air remained it wings a colored sky to lace and covers all with sy of grace |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat, Thank you for the read and nice reply. Nancy, You are a dear and it's not easy there are times the well runs dry. That is when I repost, LOL Hugs back and have a good one. suthern, Oh yes you could, you write as well as I and most times better. JM, You make my heart palpitate with your wonderful answers. Thank you sweet. I wrote you a short email this morning and will write again.  WWRS Earth Angel I'll try not to change. Thank you dear. Pat, Thank you dear and hugs back. Ethel, Thank you for reading and commenting. VAS, In havoc would work just as well. The I is a litle bit of ego I think LOL. Thank you my dear I always enjoy our comments. WhiteRose That is what I look for, thank you so much. Martie, You are so sweet and kind, big hugs. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssss) Oh Seymour, this is wonderful, sweet friend, yes, many changes are not good but if we look up to Him we only change for the better in establishing faith! (smiles) This is excellent, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Noah, Thank you for the kind words and the bump. |
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