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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2002-10-16 01:13 AM



sometimes I feel it--
blood for type
forgive me? sharing
slice of vein
Instead of sleep
I type the dream--
and pray the taste
of bile abstains.

sometimes I wonder
what is this?
"I've left another pool of thought..."
sometimes I pray
you can't see me
within entrails
of my own slaught.

sometimes I read
your words and touch
my salty lips and then?
I touch the screen...
in wonderment--
amazed
to find myself again.

© Copyright 2002 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Dark Angel
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1 posted 2002-10-16 02:12 AM


sighhhh I can relate.

Wonderful Luscious... especially this....

sometimes I read
your words and touch
my salty lips and then?
I touch the screen...
in wonderment--
amazed
to find myself again.


hugs

Maree

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2 posted 2002-10-16 02:54 AM


"'I've left another pool of thought ..'"

Marvelous.

I also concur with Maree about the last stanza.  Thank you for the smile.

regards2you
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3 posted 2002-10-16 08:03 AM


This perfectly describes what happens almost on a daily basis to me, and it never fails to amaze me. In my heart of hearts is ever the ~thank you for telling me more about me~ thoughts and feelings buried, brought to light in sometimes a shocking instant!

This is a ~great poem~ Thanks for confirming what I've discovered. So good to know others feel the same.


Warm Regards,
Pat  

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

Cpat Hair
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4 posted 2002-10-16 08:25 AM


nicely done witch....but then again you do have a way of casting spells with your words...as do others here. You seem to capture the feel of this very well...


Janet Marie
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5 posted 2002-10-16 09:07 AM


who knew ice blue could be so warm?  
(besides us moths)

[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (10-16-2002 09:08 AM).]

brian sites
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6 posted 2002-10-16 09:23 AM


you
touch
more
than
screen

you
are more
than
touch

youami
b

Enchantress
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7 posted 2002-10-16 09:35 AM


Dang serenity!
The last stanza....WOW!
I can really relate to this...
wonderful...much enjoyed.
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

serenity blaze
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8 posted 2002-10-16 12:45 PM


I don't think I know how to express gratitude--sometimes, for all my love of words, I find them rather inadequate.

But I do humbly thank you all.
I touch the screen because YOU touch ME.

quiet "thank you"

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9 posted 2002-10-16 07:20 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwwwww, this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I too know this feeling where I just seem to drift off into la-la land reading your wonderful words and many others then coming back to earth again and I feel dizzy! (big hugggsssss) This is excellent, sweet friend, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

bsquirrel
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10 posted 2002-10-18 03:10 PM


Keep touching.
Gentle Spirit
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11 posted 2002-10-18 03:14 PM


nodding and asking the same as Mikey......please keep touching.
Your words amaze....

scorpio
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12 posted 2002-10-18 03:40 PM


That last stanza is mighty powerful...it gave me a chill...the image leapt off the page...
garysgirl
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13 posted 2002-10-18 08:02 PM


Karen, YOU touch me with your words. Your words really are amazing  to me. Thanks for sharing.


Love To All,
Ethel

Kielo
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14 posted 2002-10-18 09:14 PM


You're beautiful.

Kielo

Dr.Moose1
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15 posted 2002-10-18 09:26 PM


serenity,
"Wonderment" I've a feeling that's not too far from " Bewilderment", seems like I may have passed through there efore (that's kinda like "before", only without 'puters).
Anyway, liked your poem, be well.
Doc

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16 posted 2002-10-19 01:22 AM


*Nods*


~Yeti

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