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regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

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0 posted 2002-10-15 08:27 PM

If I Could Give You Anything

I'd give you the freedom
to find yourself
among your perfect deeds.
And, give you time
to take a chance
and fail, ~successfully~!

I'd let you learn why not to do
the things you weren't
allowed to try.
And, let you weep the bitter tears
you weren't allowed to cry.

And, even when your pride got hurt,
I would let you be.
I would be so careful,
no judgement or shame from me.

If I could give you anything
I'd be a mirror of all you've done.
An image showing you're okay,
you'll always be a number one.

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

WhiteRose
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somebody's dungeon

1 posted 2002-10-15 08:29 PM

If I could give you anything
I'd be a mirror of all you've done.
An image showing you're okay,
you'll always be a number one.

A lovely write. Enjoyed!

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08

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Jacksonville, Florida, USA

2 posted 2002-10-15 09:08 PM

Awesome poem

Cold hands means a warm heart

SmartChick
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On A Journey To The Unknown

3 posted 2002-10-16 07:36 AM

This is a wonderful poem. I really like it.

Cpat Hair

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4 posted 2002-10-16 08:28 AM

wonderful thoughts and well written... I enjoyed this a great deal....

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light

5 posted 2002-10-16 08:41 AM

Pat, this is definitely going into my library. Not only was it written incredibly well, the messages woven through your words should be heard by all young people--actually, all people. I am so moved by this piece of writing.

"to take a chance and fail, ~successfully~!"

brilliant!

Linda

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

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6 posted 2002-10-17 06:30 PM

enjoyed

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

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7 posted 2002-10-18 12:58 PM

Pat, I really like this poem. It is very good. Thanks for sharing.

Love To All,
Ethel
I looked back at the thread you mentioned in your reply to my poem earlier. I printed the reply from Rob so that I can refer to it over and over again. Thanks a lot for bringing it to my attention. Ethel

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

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8 posted 2002-10-18 05:21 AM

White Rose, Loner23, Smartchick,
Thanks for reply

Cpat, Thank you for comments.

Linda, thanks for noticing the messages woven throughout. I agree, too bad all people could not have recieved this kind of love. I appreciate you commenting in depth.

Ethel, Thanks...Glad you saw my note to you, I also printed out the 10-page thread, besides his original comments which were superb! Not sure I'll be able to use it well, but certainly is interesting. And so kind of him to take the time he did in explaining and teaching. Great!

Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Munda
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9 posted 2002-10-18 04:00 PM

This poem most certainly "speaks." Wonderful write!

Toerag
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Ala bam a

10 posted 2002-10-18 04:51 PM

If everyone would think of their mate or friend as number one....more marriages and relationships would last....nice write gal

suthern

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11 posted 2002-10-18 04:59 PM

This is a wonderful write! *S* I enjoyed it very much. *S*

Auguste

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By the sea

12 posted 2002-10-18 09:52 PM

A very wise and heartfelt write. I enjoyed every word.

The stars will shine when I am gone,
the earth will turn on as before,
the gulls, still race along the shore,
the morning star, still kiss the dawn

passing shadows
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displaced

13 posted 2002-10-18 10:07 PM

well it's clear your love shines through in this one very brightly!

SimplyGold
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14 posted 2002-10-20 12:08 PM

regards2you,

Yes, I like this very much for the following reasons:

l. The rhythme was very smooth
2. The words, while there are many, I particulary enjoyed "I'd give you freedom to find yourself among your perfect deeds
and give you time to take a chance and fail successfully."

This is one I put in my personal library under "Wisdom Poetry". Never too soon or too late to learn and often needs reminding. Thanks for the post.

Regards 2 YOU
SG

[This message has been edited by SimplyGold (10-20-2002 11:16 AM).]

CSKpoet
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Island in Paradise

15 posted 2002-10-20 04:07 AM

Ahhhh yes! Unconditional love... A super write, my friend! You describe it well!
Cher

Poetry is:
Passion, imagination and intellect running together.

Aloha with warmest regards, Cheryl Stewart Koomoa

Mistletoe Angel

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16 posted 2002-10-20 12:49 PM

(sigh) Oh Ethel, this is so well said, sweet friend, I know just how you feel and I want to be the hero for my Joanna and always be there for her too! (big hugggssssss) This is heartfelt, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ethel, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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