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Martie

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0 posted 2002-10-15 08:27 PM

From a Maui Balcony

Warm wind fills the palm tree
her graceful fingers curve across dusky rose
sipped and softened until like a feather

oh my hair blows across his cheek
and his eyes are reflected scarlet pools
saying sudden rain would catch
and melt into the curve that breathes
he says this with his eyes

his whim to take the sky and me
into the sanctuary of his tenderest touch
I can see this as he turns

to sun in repose against the birth of island
slowly sinking into mauve
and the moon is a twist of lime
a twink of first star a gift like jewel
on bended knee with sweet breath
hands in balcony touched and touching

from a Maui balcony

[This message has been edited by Martie (10-15-2002 08:29 PM).]

WhiteRose
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1 posted 2002-10-15 08:30 PM

This is breathtaking Martie. I enjoyed this lovely write. You captured a moment for us to see in your words. It's grand!

Enchantress
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2 posted 2002-10-15 08:40 PM

Are you still in Maui Martie??
Oooh it sounds wonderful!!
I do hope you had or are having a fantastic time.

Take care sweet poetess.
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
So you won't ever forget me ~

Martie

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3 posted 2002-10-15 08:42 PM

WhiteRose--It is a breathtaking place.

Nancy--I'm home now...and I had a wonderful time..thanks.

Sunshine

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4 posted 2002-10-15 08:44 PM

don't kick off the sand just yet,
not until we have a few more
of these lovelies...

thank you

for coming home!

Earth Angel
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5 posted 2002-10-15 09:04 PM

So that's where you were! Sounds like you had a wonderful time in Maui! From this beautiful glimpse from (and on!!) the balcony, I certainly would have had a wonderful time if I had been you! tehe

Glad you're back safe and sound---and writing!

Linda

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6 posted 2002-10-15 09:08 PM

Yep, you did.....yep....you did, you did,
you did.....

Go ahead....do it again.....I dare ya!

Bill Charles
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7 posted 2002-10-15 10:58 PM

Martie - reads like somewhere I would like to be...

BC

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8 posted 2002-10-15 11:06 PM

Martie,

My sister and her new husband went to Hawaii for their honeymoon this past summer. Sounds like you had just as breathtaking a time as they did. Glad you enjoyed your vacation.

Dawn

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9 posted 2002-10-15 11:48 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwwwww, this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I love Maui so much and hope you are having a wonderful time there, yay! (kiss on cheek) This is breathtaking, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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10 posted 2002-10-16 12:10 PM

Martie~ Lovely poem. I'm sure it must have been beautiful in Hawaii.
Glad you are back sharing your beautiful words with us...Paul

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11 posted 2002-10-16 12:17 PM

This is so filled with imagery, Martie...
and it sounds like you had a wonderful time

~ welcome back hugs

Lyra

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"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Dark Angel
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12 posted 2002-10-16 03:14 AM

wow I can see how much you loved Maui hon.
a breath taking write Martie

Welcome back.

Maree

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13 posted 2002-10-16 08:26 AM

lovely!! Nice to have you back among us...and sounds like you perhaps were not ready to come home...

Great writing Martie... and sounds like a great time on your trip...

hugs my friend..

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14 posted 2002-10-16 09:18 AM

oh my hair blows across his cheek
and his eyes are reflected scarlet pools
saying sudden rain would catch
and melt into the curve that breathes
he says this with his eyes

his whim to take the sky and me
into the sanctuary of his tenderest touch
I can see this as he turns

to sun in repose against the birth of island
slowly sinking into mauve
and the moon is a twist of lime
a twink of first star a gift like jewel
on bended knee with sweet breath
hands in balcony touched and touching

==========================================

oh how i missed reading you...
but after reading this exquisite offering it sure dont sound like ya missed us LOL

and thats a very good thing for inspiration.
Welcome home groovy girlie.

Unknown to us, there are moments when crevices open for time to come alive with begining.

John O'Donohue
Conamara Blues

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15 posted 2002-10-16 09:22 AM

Lovely images, very lovely. Could make on envious of the opportunity to be in Maui, especially on this 35 degree morning.

The "oh" in the 2nd stanza doesn't feel right to me, it's like it would be better without it or to include "my, how" with it, i.e. oh, my, how my hair blows...

Just my observation, for what it's worth.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Goodknight
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16 posted 2002-10-16 12:59 PM

Martie - what a wonderful moment you capture and share with us with this lovely poem - Maui is a magical place and your poetry gives great insight into that magic and how it weaves that magic in a person - loved it - thanks for this lovely view - Paul

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17 posted 2002-10-16 01:42 PM

Martie,
Yano, sometimes you get so far out I don't know if you will make it back. But you always do. Loved it.

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18 posted 2002-10-16 01:44 PM

WOW!

RMW
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19 posted 2002-10-16 01:48 PM

Martie ... can only echo the above. Bob

Auguste

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20 posted 2002-10-16 04:02 PM

Martie, this is so pretty. You should've put one of your photos with the poem.

*hugs*

The stars will shine when I am gone,
the earth will turn on as before,
the gulls, still race along the shore,
the morning star, still kiss the dawn

brian madden
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21 posted 2002-10-16 05:43 PM

Martie, sounds like you had a wonderful time. This is a beautiful poem.

El riesgo vive siempre!

Martie

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22 posted 2002-10-16 06:12 PM

Karilea--no matter where I am, I'll always find my way back to the blue pages.

Linda--Yes, it was beauitful...not just from the balcony.  Thanks.

Barry--Dare me, huh?  You don't have to do that...you know there will be more eventually.

Bill--Yes...being the romantic you are, you would love it.

Dawn--There were many newlyweds there...a good place for that special time.

Noah--Sounds like you've been there...Hugs!

Lyra--Thanks Lyra and hugs back!

Maree--Thanks for the breathtaking, sweet friend.

Ron--I would probably get island fever if I lived there...but I sure would like to go back one day.  Hugs!

Janet Marie--Yes, can always use inspiration and being groovy, like you.

Virginia--Thanks so much for your thoughtful reply.

Paul--Your replies always give me a smile..thank you.

Sharon--Is that a good wow?

Bob--The same as above.

Michael--One day I'll learn how to do that...hate to keep bothering Nan to do it for me.

brian--Sure did...I'm glad you liked.

Marge Tindal

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23 posted 2002-10-16 07:16 PM

MartieSis~
A lovely poem from a relaxed and lovely you !
Sounds like the trip was everything you and Taylor thought it would be~
Love n' hugs~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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garysgirl

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24 posted 2002-10-17 02:13 AM

Marti, this was a wonderful poem. I'm glad that you came back from Hawaii so I could read your poetry. From all your replies from everybody, it sounds like you are a very popular person. I'm very glad to meet you and am looking forward to reading more of your work. Thanks for sharing.

Love To All,
Ethel...garysgirl

Elizabeth Santos
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25 posted 2002-10-17 04:43 AM

Marti, Your words are so exuisit. you write as only you can, and it gives me such joy to be friends with someone of your talent. This is superb! Thank you for the beautiful glimpse
Much love
Liz

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26 posted 2002-10-17 11:28 AM

Oh Martie ... absolutely beautiful! You've captured the mood, the feeling, the essence of this moment in time perfectly. Just loved it!

Best wishes,
/Kit

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27 posted 2002-10-17 02:05 PM

Very beautiful...felt as if I was there...
Great work Martie.

H.

Dark Angel
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28 posted 2002-10-23 05:35 PM

Now that I've seen photo's I can see just how much you've captured its beauty Martie... thanks so much for sharing and for taking me there.

Maree hugs

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29 posted 2002-10-25 01:57 PM

You know Martie, I've gotten a recommendation to read your work from two completely different, but equally reliable sources... and now I can see why.

Your ability to describe and beautify the physical world is definitely what I draw from this poem... everything in this piece is so exquisite... I felt the emotions even when you weren't directly stating them, simply by how you viewed your surroundings.  I imagine you also write terrific haiku poetry, or would, if you haven't.  I'll have to peek over your post history to see for myself.

Wonderful writing, Martie.  I'm glad I let my curiousity lead me to your work.

You've caught my eye.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

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