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She Danced
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She Danced |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets 
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I watched the red numbers flip to 8:30. Working late again, folders stacked in towers. I was flipping off the light, Gray ovrecoat in one hand, briefcase in the other... And she danced around the corner, Boxes balanced precariously in bared arms. Her dress twirled with her spinning, Raising to reveal cheap leather shoes And gorgeous ankles. I leaned back against the door, Worried she'd find me watching But I was caught, tranfixed. She moved like a gentle breeze, Her eyes dancing with her legs. I jostled the knob When I tried to melt further into the door, Bringing her to a stop. She didn't make a sound But turned and fled the way she'd come. I caught the look in her eyes. Afraid...but infuriated. She kept me up that night. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I like it Cold hands means a warm heart |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
This made me smile. A soft moment of voyeurism..Hmmmm..is there such a thing?  I like this. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done and told..... Enjoyed the peek into chance encounter as well as the change in scenery... yes some nights such things do keep us up... not what was but what we build off of.. looking forward to the second one MI... [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (10-15-2002 04:40 PM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
MI enjoyed the look at this shy dancer....good paint of character. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
This is enjoyable. Read it through couple times. Liked the details. Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I read this earlier---and it's wonderful Philip... geeze, izzat one "l" or two? I'm getting confused now... but I think this is one of my favorites from you...unaffected and honest and YOU. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Ah yes.."gorgeous ankles'...was she wearing an ankle bracelet??? And were her toe nails painted red??? Sorry i digress...most of we men can relate to this poem...been there...done that...just a moment in time...thank you for reminding us. ...believe what your heart feels... |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
cool. like scorpio said, most guys can relate. funny how simple we are in comparison, just a twirl and we're transfixed. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I caught the look in her eyes. Afraid...but infuriated. She kept me up that night. ------------------------------------------- I love the feel and flow to this... great images come to mind.... heh heh....good stuff!! ~Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Yes, Philip, You did paint a picture here with your words. Very well, too, I say. With Love To All, Ethel....garysgirl |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
So is this the beginning or do I need to go back further! I can't wait to read more fine poet!  ~Sheri |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Philip, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I love it, your words are always a treasure to read! (big hugggsssss) Bravo, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Philip, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
*sighing here* Excellent work, Masked One. "two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light |
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FuzzyFrazzledFraggle Member
since 2002-09-20
Posts 155Fraggle Rock |
hmm..enjoyed, couldn't chose a fave part because every word was delicious..umm pay no mind to me my brain is a bit fuzzy or maybe frazzled atm..methinks it's way past my bedtime Consider yourself fuzzed |
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