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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2002-10-15 03:25 PM

Near walk this line
Lapsing into weave
If with eyes closed
I twirl my thoughts
Trying to remember
Child like the things
Inside once
Once upon a time

Straight narrow pointed
One-way only they say
Far walking dreadful
Fall but not able
To forget the lines
Drawn

We wait
Line lapsing again
Across years of No
Months of why
To ask is there room
On imaginary connections
Stringing two points together
For more than teetering
Balance
Arms outstretched
Like once
Once upon a time

Spin me sky
Till dizzy am I
And child inside
Can cry

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

1 posted 2002-10-15 03:28 PM

Spin me sky
Till dizzy am I
And child inside
Can cry

This is wonderful. Enjoyed the read.

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

2 posted 2002-10-15 04:36 PM

This is a very good poem. I liked it. Thanks for sharing.

With Love To All,
Ethel...garysgirl

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

3 posted 2002-10-15 05:02 PM

a little take on my longings of childhood:

I want cool breezes
and fingertips
tracing circles
of goosebumps
on my back
in mindless repetition...
Warm, soft lips,
baptizing me
like summer rain
falling
on a sweaty, wondrous child--
eyes shut tight, arms spread wide,
dancing in circles,
dizzy with life...

Smile...YOU

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

4 posted 2002-10-15 05:36 PM

Precious...

~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

5 posted 2002-10-15 06:05 PM

Ron

To free the child sometimes takes a spin around. I could feel his tears in this emotive poem.

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

6 posted 2002-10-15 06:21 PM

Incredibly deeply touching.
I am in awe of your poetic skills.

With Warm Regards,
Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

7 posted 2002-10-15 06:50 PM

Capt,
Unusual write, enjoyed.

jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

8 posted 2002-10-16 10:25 AM

I have become rather 'undizzy', too somber, and un-free, my muse doesn't like it much, she has grown too quiet, but I fear falling, will you catch my hand if I start spinning?

great poem

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

9 posted 2002-10-16 10:34 AM

Ron, you so often spin my thoughts so that they can make no sense of it, that's how you started this poem, for me, but you ended it with a clarity that helped me fully feel the sense of sorrow, of crying for release of sadness to weep out and save you from its pain and pressure.

Well done, as usual!!!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

10 posted 2002-10-18 03:01 PM

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (10-18-2002 03:02 PM).]

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