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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2002-10-15 08:54 AM


Rewrite Repost:


Surcease

Surcease for me a rocking chair.
My naked feet high in the air
Belching echoes’ of moans and groans
Resting this weary bag of bones.

Where little good of me remains
With time worn hands and liver stains
And now another feature share
I’ve lost that lovely head of hair.

Some tokens heal, my cat surcease
I knead her as I think on peace
She answers me with purrs so loud
They dull the closing aging shroud.

I quell within my rocking chair
Sooth the flares of pain I bear
Reduce the groans and undertones
And try to rest this bag of bones.

With rest my eyes begin to close
I drift away and start to doze.
And when I doze I am passé
Of age, of pain and resume



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Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2002-10-15 08:59 AM


yes Seymour, and it is a fine reflection of life and insight.  Well done.

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

Enchantress
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2 posted 2002-10-15 09:04 AM


Sy, You're not getting older...
just wiser and better!
Beautiful write love.
~Morning hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

Elizabeth Santos
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3 posted 2002-10-15 09:07 AM


Oh, to be the cat!
Sounds like a peaceful nap
Til you awake with another genius poem in your head
Enjoyed this
Liz

regards2you
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4 posted 2002-10-15 09:29 AM


It is interesting when you come up with a poem where at first, it seems you're not saying much, the reality is you've said so much, not surprising.

I love this poem.

Could hear each squeaking rock of the chair and the satisfied cat. Mmmmm, made me sleepy and I just woke up!

Warm Regards,
Pat   

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

VAS
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5 posted 2002-10-15 10:25 AM


I enjoyed this read a lot. Your playful regard to aging was light and airy, but I have to say I enjoyed the flow of rhythm and sounds in this most of all. Truly a delightful read, effervescent in its feel, despite the plaintive message. It exudes a joy in aging as opposed to the opposite or consequence of not aging.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Earth Angel
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6 posted 2002-10-15 10:36 AM


Mr. T.--I love you! There, I've proclaimed it for the whole world to see!

You are wise, you are kind, you are loving, you are humble, you are talented, you are romantic--- and you are hysterically funny!

P.S. I can't get the comical visual out of my mind of you naked in a rocking chair with your feet up in the air! hahahaha  I love it!

EA

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2002-10-15 10:36 AM


Gentle Spirit,
Thank you for the well done.

Enchantress,
Hugs back.

Elizabeth,
I would you be the cat. Love Sy

Pat,
Thank you for the lovely answer.

VAS,
A wise observation, thank you.

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2002-10-15 10:39 AM


Earth Angel,
You brought my first smile of the day, thank you.

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9 posted 2002-10-15 10:47 AM


Professor Seymour........You have done another superb piece of work. I even like your comments to your replys...done with such poetic grace. Thanks for doing a repost on this, so I didn't miss it. By the way, we're not getting older...just better. Besides, don't you know that  "age" is just a number?? HEEHEE!


Love to All,
Ethel

Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 2002-10-15 10:50 AM


Ethel,
For that you get a

LngJhnAg
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11 posted 2002-10-15 10:54 AM


That bag of bones of which you write
Is the frame of a poet whose words shed light.
Each verse rings true and thereby portends,
The fate we share as lifetime friends.

As you ease yourself into your rest,
With faithful cat perched on your chest,
Close your eyes and rest my friend,
You're here with us, through your fine pen.

Sy - You write some of the tighest poetry I've ever read.  Your poems have a twist in their words that makes me stop to think, "How did he manage that?"



nakdthoughts
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12 posted 2002-10-15 11:01 AM


a "bag of bones", you are not!

I could feel this one today, Sy.

hugsss
M

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13 posted 2002-10-15 11:17 AM




(big hugggssssss) Oh Seymour, every poem you post you not only get wiser, but also the spirit of youth in your blood always continues to boil with joy and fill your golden heart as we are all forever young! (sigh) This is wonderrful, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

WhiteRose
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14 posted 2002-10-15 11:25 AM


Sy, this was wonderful. A funny and poignant look at life. Thanks for the read. Enjoyed this, and I don't know, I'm thinking about buying a rocker now.
Seymour Tabin
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15 posted 2002-10-15 12:12 PM


LngJhnAg,
Where have you been you old pirate. And stop kicking your cat you'll need her one of these days. LOL Thanks for the read and wonderful comments.

Maureen,
Hello sweet heart glad you stopped by.
and thank you.

Noah,
You write the nices things, thank you.

WhiteRose
Well if you do buy a good one. LOL


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16 posted 2002-10-15 01:09 PM


You know if this didn't ring so true for me I would think it funny?  I am thinking of recording the sounds I make getting up from a chair or couch and I bet it would be a best seller for the young crowd Sy.  Good write this was indeed my friend.

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Let there be peace on earth, and let it begin with

Janet Marie
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17 posted 2002-10-15 02:54 PM


Surcease for me a rocking chair.
My naked feet high in the air
Belching echoes of moans and groans
Resting this weary bag of bones.

Where little good of me remains
With time worn hands and liver stains
And now another feature share
I've lost that lovely head of hair.

=========================================
ya know why your hair fell out?
there wasnt room for it and all that wisdom and humility.

Did someone say Naked in a Rocking chair???
NOW thats what I call imagery!!!  LOL


*kissing me Stinkylove on that beautiful bald head*


I got your email Sy-babers...and wrote you back late last night to the new address...havent gotten anything since...so dont know if mine went thru to you...
maybe its gremlins?  *L*




Unknown to us, there are moments when crevices open for time to come alive with begining.

John O'Donohue
Conamara Blues

Seymour Tabin
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18 posted 2002-10-15 04:25 PM


JM,
Then my pate has a date with a kiss. My lovely moth. Glad you got my mail, I haven't had a chance to check today but I will and I will write.


Sharon,
Maybe it's true for me but not for you, my lovely ball of energy.

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