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Effigy
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0 posted 10-15-2002 12:24 AM       View Profile for Effigy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Effigy


elegant dancing shimmers of light
reflect from shinny worn remains
of less than ballerinas and more spare change rattles like drums beating out rhythms echoing
from empty auditorium seats cob web paradise
where light shimmers such as shaman
dancing to aboriginal drum beats mix into a subversive subcultural
ballet melody drifting through
cool night air humid and steamy
flamingly abstract notes whisper angel soft like young punks terrorizing
old ladies with less memories
of today then yesterday
ballet
dance old lady
dance



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1 posted 10-15-2002 10:17 AM       View Profile for VAS   Email VAS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for VAS

amazing images strewn through this...I hope you don't mind, but it's almost like words have been tossed into a blender with dancing on their mind, and what has come about is what one would see when the blender is at its spin

a concoction that is mesmerizing, captivating, but not easily understood, perceived

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

WhiteRose
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2 posted 10-15-2002 10:19 AM       View Profile for WhiteRose   Email WhiteRose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for WhiteRose

Wow! This is incredible. It is as if the words just danced out onto the page. Wonderful!
Effigy
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3 posted 10-15-2002 01:41 PM       View Profile for Effigy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Effigy

Thank you. That is in essience the affect that I was going for. It was pure free thought.
FuzzyFrazzledFraggle
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Fraggle Rock


4 posted 10-23-2002 01:56 AM       View Profile for FuzzyFrazzledFraggle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for FuzzyFrazzledFraggle

love your style..and such..hrm..brain frazzled..perhaps I should go to bed!? wish I could be more orginal tonight..

Consider yourself fuzzed


[This message has been edited by FuzzyFrazzledFraggle (10-23-2002 01:58 AM).]

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5 posted 10-23-2002 02:10 AM       View Profile for WhileIWasGone   Email WhileIWasGone   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for WhileIWasGone

Beautiful...enjoyed very much.

DeaDiAmore
brian madden
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6 posted 10-23-2002 07:06 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

Wes, reading this two writers come to mind "Burroughs" and "Jim Morrison" this meant as a compliment. Such wonderful vivid images. This one is for the library. Great read.

The ladders of life that we scale merrily Move mysteriously around So that when you think you're climbing up, man In fact you're climbing down-Nick ca

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This is really good. I like this. I agree with the statement above. It's as if the words were thrown in a blender and came out dancing. The first read through is a little overwhelming, but that's not a critique. That's just a statement, and it can be good or bad. The only negative thing I have to say is that you mispelled "shiny".
 
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