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Open Poetry #23

'Tis Tide (A small rhyme)

Essorant
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since 2002-08-10

Posts 4769
Regina, Saskatchewan; Canada

0 posted 2002-10-14 11:31 PM

'Tis Tide

'Tis tide to sing our dreams sublime
'Tis tide to wing along
and fill night's glass with charm and rhyme
crescendoing in song

'Tis tide to give the stars good cheer
with merriment in sway
let each one bliss's blare well hear
as hearts high notes will play

Let's troll our souls and take our source
and troll our wassails gold
with wine and words and intercourse
let each one solace hold

[This message has been edited by Essorant (10-14-2002 11:51 PM).]

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2002-10-14 11:36 PM

Enjoyed the read

Cold hands means a warm heart

Essorant
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since 2002-08-10

Posts 4769
Regina, Saskatchewan; Canada

2 posted 2002-10-14 11:48 PM

Miss--
Graces. I'm glad to know you enjoyed the read.

take care,
Essorant

[This message has been edited by Essorant (10-14-2002 11:49 PM).]

DawnG

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since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

3 posted 2002-10-15 12:02 PM

Very beautiful

Dawn

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2002-10-15 02:23 AM

This poem is very good. I enjoyed it very much. thanks for sharing it.

With Love To All,
Ethel

majnu

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since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

5 posted 2002-10-15 02:32 AM

a very cool rhyme at that.

if i may i would suggest removing the "will" from stanza 2 line 4. when i read it out loud i kept getting caught there, but when i tried it without the "will" it flowed much better.

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