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Quantum Poet
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0 posted 2002-10-14 03:38 PM



Murky and venomous my words have been,
Echoing a ill and dwindling world.
Visions of demise and continual injury
Have been scrawled upon these vacant sheets.

Too long my heart has poured forth fury.
Ache and loss have intertwined.
My children born have lived incased
On lonely paper in impotent rage.

But now!...

Finally this bitter spell does break,
The past, its hold relinquishes.
No more my days lived years before.
The future now my soul does call.

O glorious day, marvelous night
That holds my passions and buries my pain.
My heart leaps forth wanting to live,
As once it was and once more shall be.

My body animated by an unworldly force
That raises my banner to challenge the world.
It was, shall be, as if never once broken,
Whole once more to face the dawn.

© Copyright 2002 Quantum Poet - All Rights Reserved
the_loner_23
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1 posted 2002-10-14 03:42 PM


I like this poem

Cold hands means a warm heart

Earth Angel
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2 posted 2002-10-14 03:44 PM


Bravo to you Quantum Poet! You have taken a quantam leap in your life!

Welcome to your new extended family of kindred spirits. You're off to a great start with this poem. It was so powerful and liberating--so full of hope and optimism!

I'm looking forward to reading more of your poetry!

Earth Angel

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3 posted 2002-10-14 03:45 PM


Well done!! Welcome to Passions!! Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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4 posted 2002-10-14 03:51 PM


A very powerful first post.  Welcome to Passions!  Please check your e-mail for a special greeting.  
WhiteRose
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5 posted 2002-10-14 03:55 PM


Welcome to Passions QP, I'm sure you'll love it here.

A wonderful poem you debuted with. Enjoyed and am looking forward to more.

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6 posted 2002-10-14 04:00 PM




Yay!!! Oh my gosh, we are all sooooo proud of you, this is a wonderfully upbeat debut, I love it! Welcome to Passions, sweet Quantum Poet, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely poetry, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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7 posted 2002-10-14 04:14 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
Wonderful opening post!
I look forward to seeing more of your work.
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
8 posted 2002-10-14 04:15 PM



Finally this bitter spell does break,
The past, its hold relinquishes.
No more my days lived years before.
The future now my soul does call.


This encapsulated your entire poem for me.  The freedom we feel once that break has been made is, for lack of better words, total bliss.  Welcome to Passions, QP.  I'm looking forward to more of your works.

Karilea
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I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound

Quantum Poet
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9 posted 2002-10-15 03:38 PM


Thankyou all for the welcome.

Im glad you folks liked the poem.

Arlindo

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