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Tiersdin
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0 posted 2002-10-12 07:06 AM



How far did I get in eighty days?
No balloon nor vehichle of any sort
Could have carried me further
I'd crossed bridges embellished
With gold at sunrise
Braved waterfalls slipping
Upon the crag
Mapped jungles, forged seas
I was indeed the cameleon
Fitting into any circumstance
I'd happened upon
All in an effort to run
from you
Little good it did me~
I am back full circle
Inhaling the breath from
Every word you speak
Just as you'd always
Known I would...
~Tier
10/02


"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

[This message has been edited by Tiersdin (10-12-2002 07:08 AM).]

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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
1 posted 2002-10-12 09:25 AM



I was sitting
warm and comfortable
until I read this
then the chills began...
perhaps I see
through the lines...

Duncan
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Posts 5455

2 posted 2002-10-12 10:08 AM


All in an effort to run
from you
Little good it did me~
I am back full circle
Inhaling the breath from
Every word you speak

A circle I'm very familiar with.  Anyone seen an exit ramp?  lol
As always, Tier...excellent.

regards2you
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3 posted 2002-10-12 10:24 AM


Tiersdin,
You are by far, my favorite poet of love poems. Your "Still" touched me so deeply, I cried.

Your skill and talent are awesome and I thank you so much for sharing with the rest of us, that which we feel but can rarely bring to the surface, let alone write.

Warmly,
Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

Kethry
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Victoria Australia
4 posted 2002-10-12 10:41 AM


Always you move in circles, but circles are also spiral. Loved the imagery of the poem.
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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just out of reach
5 posted 2002-10-12 01:19 PM


Little good it did me~
I am back full circle
Inhaling the breath from
Every word you speak
Just as you'd always
Known I would...

Oh yes, I have been round this block a few times myself!! Excellent write. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Mistletoe Angel
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6 posted 2002-10-12 02:37 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, I know this feeling so well and may every step you make lead you back to the one you love happily! (kiss on cheek) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Tiersdin, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Ivy Rose
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7 posted 2002-10-12 03:31 PM


Tiersdin...Gorgeous poem!!!! How often we try to run from that which is too painful to endure. This poem so beautifully creates images of just such a flight.  ***Ivy Rose
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8 posted 2002-10-12 04:16 PM


Tier, perhaps the biggest compliment I can give is that I wish I could write like you.

The stars will shine when I am gone,
the earth will turn on as before,
the gulls, still race along the shore,
the morning star, still kiss the dawn

FuzzyFrazzledFraggle
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9 posted 2002-10-23 01:04 AM



I am back full circle
Inhaling the breath from
Every word you speak
Just as you'd always
Known I would...

My favourite lines, then again all of it was excellent but those jumped right at me..!!

Consider yourself fuzzed

bsquirrel
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10 posted 2002-10-23 11:58 AM


Love the journey
and the destination.

Earth Angel
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11 posted 2002-10-23 12:20 PM


Tier, this was worth the wait, and is worth its weight---in gold!

Linda


JamesMichael
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12 posted 2002-10-29 03:58 AM


Well done...James
garysgirl
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13 posted 2002-10-29 10:39 AM


Tier, this is a very beautifully written work. Thanks for sharing with us.

Love To All,
Ethel

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