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The Crimson Knight
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0 posted 2002-10-12 07:04 AM


What is it
~ that pulled and held me to
~ ~ beyond the pretty face of you,
Was it lust
~ pushed up breast creamy skin
~ ~ or long muscled legs I watched dancing.
Was it sin
~ having what I desire
~ ~ that set me on fire
Or just lust
~ physical attraction
~ ~ no love’s emotion
What was it
~ that woke me in the night
~ ~ and rushed me out befor daylight
What is it
~ That pulled me back in
~ ~ was it lust or sin?

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Secret Whisper
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1 posted 2002-10-12 05:43 PM


Hmm, very deep question. I like this piece. There was one line "No love's emotion" that seemed a bit cliched and broke the flow of the piece. Wonderful write.

alice

"See, no one loves..." - Prayers for Rain

the_loner_23
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2 posted 2002-10-12 06:30 PM


Awesome write

Cold hands means a warm heart

Dopey Dope
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3 posted 2002-10-12 06:46 PM


Wow, I really loved the form the poem was written in. Very nicely done. I think I relate to this poem. Sometimes we don't know what our own intentions may be. I loved it.
Hope to see more.

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ThisDiamond
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4 posted 2002-10-12 07:31 PM


Excellent thoughts and ponders...
Well done. ThisDiamond

Enchantress
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5 posted 2002-10-12 09:47 PM


You pose some very interesting thoughts here Crimson Knight.
Well said...
~Hugs & Smiles~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

WhiteRose
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6 posted 2002-10-12 09:48 PM


Very nicely done.
Gemini
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7 posted 2002-10-12 10:01 PM


The questioning of intensions, very deep.  Nicely written.
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8 posted 2002-10-12 10:07 PM




(smiles) Yes, or perhaps it could have just been desire alone, innocent without lust or sin and just a mutual chemistry! (big hugggsssss) This is a wonderful thought, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Earth Angel
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9 posted 2002-10-12 10:09 PM


I found it very interesting how you set this poem up on the page--also a very interesting scenario!--Have you discovered the answer yet?

Well done!

P.S. I thought "lust" was a "sin"! tee-hee

EA

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10 posted 2002-10-13 12:43 PM


both
DawnG
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11 posted 2002-10-14 12:12 PM


I too enjoyed this poem and the questions you ask give us all reason to ponder.

                    Dawn

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