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WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

0 posted 2002-10-11 12:26 PM

Really all I ever wanted
was for the story of me

       to be clearer and more well defined.

You wrote with slight of hand
not magic, tragic, Confuse of motive.

A faded liturgy of me
that failed me in comprehension.

          And always in the middle
          was the image of love.

The jumble of thoughts and feelings
this left me with, was it's demise

in the end.

WhiteRose

"The first rule of poetry, write what you know."

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2002-10-11 12:28 PM

Strong poem Anne. I like it

Cold hands means a warm heart

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

2 posted 2002-10-11 12:52 PM

A powerful write which I enjoyed very much.

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

3 posted 2002-10-11 01:40 PM

This is a wonderful poem.

Irie
Senior Member

since 1999-12-01

Posts 1493
Washington State

4 posted 2002-10-11 03:29 PM

It seems this piece reveals a sad misjudgment of someone.
Perhaps this refers to the Bible and Jesus, or am I way off base here?
There is a few ways that I interpreted this, and now I am not sure which
one of my interpretations you meant to convey.
At any rate, I like the style in which this was written.

Irie leaves the room feeling like an idiot for her confusion

~Sheri

"Don't wait for your ship to come in ...
Swim out to it"

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2002-10-11 10:00 PM

(big hugggssssss) Oh Anne, this sounded sad to me, sweet friend, I hope now love has found a special place in your heart without legerdemain and tricks and curfews! (sigh) You always express yourself so well, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Anne, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

6 posted 2002-10-15 05:49 PM

WhiteRose~
This is very powerfully written and well expressed.
I enjoyed the read.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

7 posted 2002-10-15 08:12 PM

Thank you all for your comments.

Irie, don't feel confused. This was just a little ditty about the pain of there being two sides of the story, yet only one is accepted as truth, no matter that the other may be as well.

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