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baby1231 New Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 7 |
Always  wether im with u or not i always kno your thinking of me and u say you love me a whole lot but how do you kno we'll truly be what you say we'll be what would that make us now a shadow that no one pays attention to or two people that get ignored cause of their skin color but through good times and bad times i will always love you and in the end we end up together its beutiful ~~*ally d*~~  |
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sixington Member
since 2003-07-14
Posts 53Utah |
It annoyed me. i had a very difficult time getting past the abbreviations in this poem. I think you have some good lines, but i think that full words will always convey more of a message. ~ Amanda |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! It's nice to see you have decided to join us here at Passions for Poetry. I hope you enjoy your stay in here. If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact any of your moderators by e-mail. That includes me  It didn't annoy me, but I would have to agree that you should not abbreviate the words in your poems. Unless you want it to soundlike a text message. i like the way you wrote the poem, it shows a different style of writing. That means you got talent. Keep sharing, and thanks for the read You don't have to say you love me just be close at hand....... [This message has been edited by Acies (09-22-2003 05:02 PM).] |
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Why Junior Member
since 2003-09-26
Posts 32Middle of nowhere |
i agree with sixington about the abbreviations but overall this was a pretty poem |
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