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Thoughts 2 (Plz Read)

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Inioth
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0 posted 09-19-2003 10:00 AM       View Profile for Inioth   Email Inioth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Inioth

Hey Everyone here are 2 more of my poems Hope you enjoy them, these 2 both mean a lot to me.

Thought 13 (Swallowed)

Can you hear it?
like a symphony of screams
you'll never let go, it's yours
like a parasite you'll hold on to the end
Utill I am swallowed
Until my world dissolves before me, and even then you are latched
I can't see clearly anymore, are you still there?
am I finially free?
Never....
This one I did for a friend whom I care for very much.

Thought 6 (Shannon)


Why can you never see?
The beauty you have inside
it bleeds from every pore
The people that don't see it, they don't deserve it
They would betray it all in the end anyway
and then you'd hurt more.
Why can you never see??
maybe it's different for me, the outside, looking in
but I don't have to see, because I knew it all along.....

[This message has been edited by Inioth (09-19-2003 10:01 AM).]

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magic_612
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1 posted 09-19-2003 02:33 PM       View Profile for magic_612   Email magic_612   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for magic_612

I liked them.. both very full of emotion. Once again I would say the second was my fave but both were good.
Nia
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since 09-18-2003
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2 posted 09-19-2003 03:20 PM       View Profile for Nia   Email Nia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nia

Hey!! I like them both too but again I like the first one better lol. It's filled with emotion and I think alot of people can relate to it. Good work!!
WinterWren
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3 posted 09-19-2003 03:34 PM       View Profile for WinterWren   Email WinterWren   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WinterWren's Home Page   View IP for WinterWren

I can't pick which one I like better this time.
They are both very good, I love them both.
Especially the first 2 lines of the first poem.
Excellent job!

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

 
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