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Cold World

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WinterWren
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0 posted 09-19-2003 01:18 AM       View Profile for WinterWren   Email WinterWren   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit WinterWren's Home Page   View IP for WinterWren

This one is somewhat different from my usual, I think.

Don't take me from this place
though I do nothing but weep here
it was so cold in the world today
everyone so consumed in themselves

All I wanted was some comfort
what I received was so many cold-shoulders
this hurt is seeping deeper into my bones
it's all I can feel now, it's taking control.

I wish these tears could drain me into oblivion
Im so empty already
Im forgetting so many things
this shadow is covering my memory
and I've forgotten that I used to be happier.

I wish I could scream so loud
that everyone could hear me
and feel some small bit of my pain
but it just keeps welling up inside.

Im letting go of the one who knew me
without saying goodbye
I just can't believe Im doing this
my head knows the logical reason why
but my heart doesn't understand.

Im weeping endlessly,
let me float away on the river of my tears
I've never felt so alone before,
let me float away on the river of my tears
and leave this cold world behind me.


and no, that last line isn't about suicide.
thanks for reading.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

[This message has been edited by WinterWren (09-19-2003 01:19 AM).]

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Nia
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since 09-18-2003
Posts 4
Canada


1 posted 09-19-2003 07:15 AM       View Profile for Nia   Email Nia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nia

Hey I like it! Lol I don't think I would have thought the last line was about suicide even if you hadn't said anythin. It has a powerful ending which is really good and a strong opening. Good work!!
Inioth
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since 09-18-2003
Posts 12
Calgary, Alberta


2 posted 09-19-2003 10:08 AM       View Profile for Inioth   Email Inioth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Inioth

This was another great poem....you and nia are quite good at this....I think I have to work on mine a lot more.....it was so descriptive....I don't know what else to say but great job....keep writing I'd like to read more of your stuff
WinterWren
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3 posted 09-19-2003 02:07 PM       View Profile for WinterWren   Email WinterWren   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WinterWren's Home Page   View IP for WinterWren

Thanks for the comments. They mean alot to me!
Nia: Glad you liked it, and understood the last line.
Inioth: Thank you so very much! lol, I think yours are just fine. If you want, you can do a "smart search" and look up my older poems.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

young_blood
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since 09-19-2003
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Indianapolis, IN


4 posted 09-19-2003 09:12 PM       View Profile for young_blood   Email young_blood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for young_blood

wow, that was a really great one.truly good. i loved the pictures stuck in my head from it.great, great job

peachesNcream
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Posts 521
Ocean Of Tears


5 posted 09-19-2003 09:42 PM       View Profile for peachesNcream   Email peachesNcream   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for peachesNcream

Like usual, great work! Lots of emotions were expressed...I like one a lot! ~Jess

"Some of us think holding on makes us strong; but sometimes it is letting go." -Herman Hesse

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