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Riley
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in the pouring rain

0 posted 2003-09-18 09:42 PM



cold hands grip me and send chills down me
you don't understand what i have become
a transformation held before you eyes
to commit a life not relavent to you
i regret every tear i spent on you
i am still shaking so scared so alone
right now i have forgotten someone
i wish he were here now, because i need him
to hold onto me now because i am falling
still harder to the core
will you be there?

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

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WinterWren
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...Coming to
1 posted 2003-09-19 12:34 PM


Amazing piece! I especially love the first two lines.
The flow was just right, I really love it.
Thanks for sharing, it's going in my library.

WinterWren
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eor
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blues & greys
2 posted 2003-09-19 01:51 AM


you always write such beautiful poetry...

"For those who understand you, no explanation is necessary. For those who don't, none is possible."

Riley
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in the pouring rain
3 posted 2003-09-19 08:17 AM


winterwren: thank you so much, this was very spur of the moment not planned nothing....glad you enjoyed.


eor: there are no words that can express my thanks!


riley

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

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