Hey everyone I've been writing for a bit but have never posted anything, here are a couple of my poems let me know what ya think:
Why do they always want me to open I like being closed They say there's a wall there Why should I break it down?? Give me a reason What would you do if it wasn't there?? Hurt me like the rest?? Give me a reason.... A reason is all I ask I think my wall needs to be higher....I can still see you
Thought 10 (Desire) (working on the title)
Why do you do it? Show off your body the way you do? Like a piece of meat off to be auctioned... Leaving nothing to be desired You're used goods, no one will take you Except someone you don't want He'll show you off like a prize And you'll recoil, but it's what you wanted wasn't it? That is why you do it, you know it's true you'll just never admit just another one of the cattle, hope all goes well you'll never see me in the stands...
Thanks for reading Opinions are welcome
[This message has been edited by Inioth (09-18-2003 12:55 PM).]
I actually liked the second one better. It reminded me of last night. I was at a concert and some girl was all over this thirty year old security guard and she was like fifteen years old. I thought that was slightly sad and that people need to have more dignity. Anyway.. later.
seems like everyone likes the second one.... ahhh I like em all, I have lots more, I'll keep posting as the day goes on....my style seems to always be questioning, life, love, politics, religion....I like it but thanks a lot for reading...bye for now
LOL well like I said I like them Both....I'll post 2 more tomorrow one is very meaningful to me and definately has the bad overtones like these 2, the other is very nice, I wrote it for a friend who just broke up with her boyfriend to cheer her up I'd post em tonight but I gotta work so Talk to everyone later glad you all liked them =)