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green_itchy_stuff
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0 posted 2003-09-15 12:05 PM



I cant hear quite right.
Its like there's this long silence
And Im trapped somewhere towards the center
This falling

What am I
Where have I been
What am I doing
It doesnt make sense

I have to lay it out
See it come together
Right now this void of intelligence
The colors so bright, Im blind

Choking, playing guitar
There has to be a reason
But what
Short of breath, die

Backwards in reverse
Stationary
An idiot
A broken promise

I treasure nothing sincere
Nothing is sencere
Power saddness
I just want to sleep

Will it happen like they said
Im older and younger at the same time
Metal taste final meal
Glowing petals of someone who cares

Pink and dead
Constant reference and sad
Imagery fake
Title branded loser

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

© Copyright 2003 Kenneth Craig Rogers - All Rights Reserved
green_itchy_stuff
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1 posted 2003-09-16 12:17 PM


The boycot is on...........
River
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since 2003-09-16
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2 posted 2003-09-16 07:45 PM


hey, i think it sounds pretty good, i can totally identify with you. Good Job! =)

[This message has been edited by River (09-16-2003 07:46 PM).]

Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
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3 posted 2003-09-17 10:04 AM


The middle of silence...
pink and dead

Interesting.
I just want to sleep. Yeah, me too.

Im older and younger at the same time
that was probably my favorite line, I'm feeling that a lot lately.
Great piece Craig.
~Lex

Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
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Standing In Silence...
4 posted 2003-09-17 05:02 PM


I liked this. Especially this part :

Will it happen like they said
Im older and younger at the same time
Metal taste final meal
Glowing petals of someone who cares

That part was very cool. I dunno why I liked it so much, but I did lol. So anyways..Great job, and though this phrase is a little overused, I can relate to what you say in this piece. Thanks for the read.

"I'm tired of being what you want me to be."~Linkin Park

green_itchy_stuff
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5 posted 2003-09-17 09:02 PM


I get this way alot so thanx for reading.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

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