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through the lies

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fearing-laughter
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land of cheese (Wisconsin)


0 posted 09-12-2003 12:12 AM       View Profile for fearing-laughter   Email fearing-laughter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for fearing-laughter

hey, i kinda wrote this one at like four o'clock in the morning but meh, i kinda like it. honesty is always cool though. -bergundy-

get out of my head,
get out of my mind.
i hate the fact that,
i think about you,
all the time.

you never meant,
a single word you said.
but i guess,
i should have realized that,
back then.

i was stupid enough,
to let myself,
believe in you,
once again.

don't look at me,
with earnest eyes,
it may have worked before,
but now i see,
through your lies.


no one can make you feel inferior, unless you let them.--eleanor roosevelt


[This message has been edited by fearing-laughter (09-12-2003 12:13 AM).]

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anya
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since 07-27-2002
Posts 397
london england


1 posted 09-13-2003 03:57 PM       View Profile for anya   Email anya   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anya

yeah, very understandable sentiments, i liked 'dont look at with earnest eyes'...a good image there
anya
lauren03
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since 01-04-2002
Posts 66
oh, usa


2 posted 09-18-2003 08:42 PM       View Profile for lauren03   Email lauren03   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lauren03

aaaaaaaah lies, yes they suck don't they. I know how you feel though. good write, keep it up.
WinterWren
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3 posted 09-19-2003 01:05 AM       View Profile for WinterWren   Email WinterWren   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WinterWren's Home Page   View IP for WinterWren

I can relate to this one well. *sigh*
Excellent job, you put the emotion into your words.
Thanks for sharing.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

young_blood
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since 09-19-2003
Posts 1118
Indianapolis, IN


4 posted 09-19-2003 09:02 PM       View Profile for young_blood   Email young_blood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for young_blood

this was an alright poem. i like stuff that isnt so cut and dry. i liked the emotion but i would like to see some more imagery
Jaime
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5 posted 09-20-2003 01:23 AM       Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Jaime

My pleasure chain... now see, that's where things can get a little R-rated. You might want to edit that.

Anyway, I liked this except that the pauses were a little distracting. But I thought that it was simple yet as firm and as strong as any true, determined statement. Especially one that refuses victimization.

Well done.

jaime.

the faeries creep into my hair at night leaving it in terrible knots

Why
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since 09-26-2003
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6 posted 09-28-2003 12:14 AM       View Profile for Why   Email Why   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Why

nice poem, it speaks alot of truth, very nice

Poems free us and trap us all the same.
But still they put our hearts at ease.

AlostHeart
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since 05-01-2003
Posts 78
Wisconsin, U.S.


7 posted 09-29-2003 10:22 AM       View Profile for AlostHeart   Email AlostHeart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for AlostHeart

I like this it sums up a few of my relationships.
good job and keep it up
~Tori

Be happy, and respectful, dont forget about those ones that will always love you no matter how much you screw up!

 
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