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BabieDoll
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0 posted 09-11-2003 04:57 PM       View Profile for BabieDoll   Email BabieDoll   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for BabieDoll

I tell you that
I LOVE YOU
but you still don't think I mean it.
Actions speak louder than words;
mine scream at you...
I'M SO CONFUSED
...and that hurts you,
I can see it.

I tell you my
THOUGHTS,
EMOTIONS,
NEEDS;
the things I desperately yearn for.
I'm so
CONVINCING
when I SEEM to know what I want.

Then reality sets in
and I'm flooded with a thousand
WHAT IFS.
It's like a
DISEASE
that just won't go away.
REMISSION
is almost undoubtful.

I wish I were
STRONG...
but I'm not.
I wish I could
SEE...
but I can't.
I'M SORRY!...

But I know,
with utmost CERTAINTY,
that my love for you is
REAL...*

**To fear love is to fear life, and those who fear life are already three parts dead.**

© Copyright 2003 J.Lynn - All Rights Reserved
Spine Grinder
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1 posted 09-11-2003 05:19 PM       View Profile for Spine Grinder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Spine Grinder

I liked this a lot Jenn. Although...the last stanza...I didn't really like it..I don't know why...I just didn't, the rest of the poem was great though. Good job.

"I'm tired of being what you want me to be."~Linkin Park

BabieDoll
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2 posted 09-11-2003 06:37 PM       View Profile for BabieDoll   Email BabieDoll   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BabieDoll

Eh, I really didn't like the last stanza either. It kind of throws off the rest of my poem...but whatever, I can change it. LOL. Thanks for the comment hun.

~J.Lynn

**To fear love is to fear life, and those who fear life are already three parts dead.**

vlraynes
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since 07-25-2000
Posts 9136
Somewhere... out there...


3 posted 09-16-2003 04:17 AM       View Profile for vlraynes   Email vlraynes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit vlraynes's Home Page   View IP for vlraynes


Jenn...
I enjoyed this...and I especially liked
the flow of these lines...

"I tell you that
I LOVE YOU
but you still don't think I mean it.
Actions speak louder than words;
mine scream at you...
I'M SO CONFUSED
...and that hurts you,
I can see it."

Nicely done.
~Vicky

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

Acies
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4 posted 09-20-2003 12:30 PM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

Done beautifully and with a lot of emotion
Unfortunately, dating is never perfect
At least we get to write stuff about it though
thanks for sharing

You don't have to say you love me just be close at hand.......

baby1231
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5 posted 09-20-2003 07:22 PM       View Profile for baby1231   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for baby1231

i love this poem it tottaly describes me

~~8ally d*~~
Olive_8
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since 09-20-2003
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Canada


6 posted 09-21-2003 12:39 AM       View Profile for Olive_8   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Olive_8

I really like your poem, it is good to know that I can relate to what other people are going through!
Why
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7 posted 09-26-2003 09:40 PM       View Profile for Why   Email Why   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Why

i dont really know what to say that was a pretty poem
 
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