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BabieDoll
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since 2003-02-13
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BFE

0 posted 2003-09-11 04:57 PM


I tell you that
I LOVE YOU
but you still don't think I mean it.
Actions speak louder than words;
mine scream at you...
I'M SO CONFUSED
...and that hurts you,
I can see it.

I tell you my
THOUGHTS,
EMOTIONS,
NEEDS;
the things I desperately yearn for.
I'm so
CONVINCING
when I SEEM to know what I want.

Then reality sets in
and I'm flooded with a thousand
WHAT IFS.
It's like a
DISEASE
that just won't go away.
REMISSION
is almost undoubtful.

I wish I were
STRONG...
but I'm not.
I wish I could
SEE...
but I can't.
I'M SORRY!...

But I know,
with utmost CERTAINTY,
that my love for you is
REAL...*

**To fear love is to fear life, and those who fear life are already three parts dead.**

© Copyright 2003 J.Lynn - All Rights Reserved
Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...
1 posted 2003-09-11 05:19 PM


I liked this a lot Jenn. Although...the last stanza...I didn't really like it..I don't know why...I just didn't, the rest of the poem was great though. Good job.

"I'm tired of being what you want me to be."~Linkin Park

BabieDoll
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since 2003-02-13
Posts 268
BFE
2 posted 2003-09-11 06:37 PM


Eh, I really didn't like the last stanza either. It kind of throws off the rest of my poem...but whatever, I can change it. LOL. Thanks for the comment hun.

~J.Lynn

**To fear love is to fear life, and those who fear life are already three parts dead.**

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
3 posted 2003-09-16 04:17 AM



Jenn...
I enjoyed this...and I especially liked
the flow of these lines...

"I tell you that
I LOVE YOU
but you still don't think I mean it.
Actions speak louder than words;
mine scream at you...
I'M SO CONFUSED
...and that hurts you,
I can see it."

Nicely done.
~Vicky

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

Acies
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Member Rara Avis
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Posts 7665
Twilight Zone
4 posted 2003-09-20 12:30 PM


Done beautifully and with a lot of emotion
Unfortunately, dating is never perfect
At least we get to write stuff about it though
thanks for sharing

You don't have to say you love me just be close at hand.......

baby1231
New Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 7

5 posted 2003-09-20 07:22 PM


i love this poem it tottaly describes me

~~8ally d*~~

Olive_8
Junior Member
since 2003-09-20
Posts 41
Canada
6 posted 2003-09-21 12:39 PM


I really like your poem, it is good to know that I can relate to what other people are going through!
Why
Junior Member
since 2003-09-26
Posts 32
Middle of nowhere
7 posted 2003-09-26 09:40 PM


i dont really know what to say that was a pretty poem
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