How to Join Member's Area Private Library Search Today's Topics p Login
Main Forums Discussion Tech Talk Mature Content Archives
   Nav Win
 Archives
 Teen Poetry #6 Archive
 Shattered Window
 1 2 3 4 5
Follow us on Facebook

 This is an Archive. You may post a reply, but new topics are not allowed.

 
User Options
Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Admin Print Send ECard
Passions in Poetry

Shattered Window

 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
peachesNcream
Senior Member
since 08-21-2001
Posts 521
Ocean Of Tears


0 posted 09-09-2003 09:25 PM       View Profile for peachesNcream   Email peachesNcream   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for peachesNcream

*I'm still debating on this title, like usual! Tell me what ya think...*
All my life I've looked through a window,
Unable to see the full picture,
Oppurtunities have passed me by,
And still are today,
Now, that tiny window has been shattered,
I see what I have and others don't,
The tiny window was my protection,
Protecting my ignorance,
Reality has seeped into each vein of my body,
Leaving me paralyzed by fear,
Inching its way to my brain,
It has done so already,
Bringing tears of my "pain",
Staying in this mind,
Through every inch of that shattered window.


"At the touch of love, everything becomes a poem." -Plato

© Copyright 2003 Jessica Dodson - All Rights Reserved
WinterWren
Senior Member
since 12-01-2002
Posts 1044
...Coming to


1 posted 09-09-2003 10:37 PM       View Profile for WinterWren   Email WinterWren   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WinterWren's Home Page   View IP for WinterWren

I really liked this one,
especially the last 2 lines.
As for the title I think it's just right, that's what caught my attention.
Great job.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

magic_612
Member
since 07-31-2003
Posts 197
NB, Canada


2 posted 09-10-2003 07:17 AM       View Profile for magic_612   Email magic_612   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for magic_612

really good job, and I do also like the title. Thanks for sharing
SilentTears
Member
since 02-15-2003
Posts 373
Lost and Broken


3 posted 09-13-2003 03:21 PM       View Profile for SilentTears   Email SilentTears   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SilentTears

I like this. A lot. It expresses the emotion beautifully. Nice work. I'm just about speechless...Loves.

"I would sleep forever, if it meant I'd never stop dreaming..."

anya
Member
since 07-27-2002
Posts 397
london england


4 posted 09-13-2003 03:53 PM       View Profile for anya   Email anya   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anya

this made me think...am liking it though, an interesting idea
Match
Member
since 07-01-2002
Posts 287
Canada Edmonton


5 posted 09-13-2003 04:01 PM       View Profile for Match   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Match

"Reality has seeped into each vein of my body,
Leaving me paralyzed by fear" Don't you hate when that happens, I loved this poem and can relate to the shattered window idea.
I like the title.
-Ash

I wear my crown of thorns
on my liar's chair
full of broken thoughts
I cannot repair

 
 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
All times are ET (US) Top
  User Options
>> Archives >> Teen Poetry #6 >> Shattered Window Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Print Send ECard

 

pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Today's Topics | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary



© Passions in Poetry and netpoets.com 1998-2013
All Poetry and Prose is copyrighted by the individual authors