Contained: Chapter 2- "Cold Hands (A Lesson on the Way You Love)"

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Contained: Chapter 2- "Cold Hands (A Lesson on the Way You Love)"

chasing rain
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since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

0 posted 2003-09-08 07:09 PM

Contained
Chapter 2
Cold Hands (A Lesson on the Way You Love)

I lost my gloves the other day
The good ones, with the fleece lining and the leather frame.
Today, you asked if I would like to take a walk with you
In the bitter cold of December snow.
My gloves went missing, I said,
and I have to make posters.
You laughed and told me to come anyway,
Though I shook my head and complained my hands would freeze
And the doctor would have to amputate.
I would be fingerless, handless, and traumatized by the ordeal,
But you laughed despite my growing scowl
That promised lumps of coal in your stocking.
You asked a simple question, a simple walk just down the street.
It was so much more than simple.
I lost my gloves, I wasn't ready...
You offered to buy me coffee after, just to warm my hands around the cup.
You knew I didn't drink coffee
And that I would smuggle stir sticks in my pocket anyway.
Losing three dollars didn't seem too much to you
If it meant I would gain a dozen stir sticks,
And maybe a few sugar packs too
(Though you told me I didn't need the extra sugar
Since you liked me bitter in any case).
I shook my head. I wasn't ready.
My gloves were missing.

Okay, you said.

We watched a foreign film instead
Despite the lack of English subtitles
And while she died, my hands went cold...

But I still found you near.

- - - - -
Okay, everybody with me now..."AWWWWWWWWW!!!"

Yeah...it's been a long day, hence the long write. Enjoy it now, enjoy it in December...

Enjoy it when you find it.

-Leah

[This message has been edited by chasing rain (09-09-2003 11:04 PM).]

gemjop
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

1 posted 2003-09-08 07:38 PM

loved it!

loved the sugar, and bitter you part. cute!

Instant karma's gonna get you.

chasing rain
Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

2 posted 2003-09-10 11:30 PM

Glad you liked it. I agree, that line is my favorite one. I think I'll keep it

BabieDoll
Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 268
BFE

3 posted 2003-09-13 12:38 PM

I really enjoyed this poem...

~J.Lynn

**To fear love is to fear life, and those who fear life are already three parts dead.**

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

4 posted 2003-09-13 08:59 PM

I'm just going to sit and think about that for a long, long time. Thankyou so much... it made my day seem a little better.

-Lioness

*Dark Princess*
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since 2003-04-13

Posts 22
lost in the shadows

5 posted 2003-09-14 01:59 AM

I like this....Cute and sweet...dont know if thats how it was ment, but good job
Princess

Lexy
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since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

6 posted 2003-09-14 10:35 PM

I really do love this piece.It made me all warm inside. Creative protrayal.
Lex

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