Teen Poetry #6 |
Contained- Chapter 1: "Questions on the Way You Breathe" |
chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Chapter 1 Questions on the Way You Breathe Insanity is overrated. (Having a twisted ) Sanity isn't. Will you choose to listen... or will you walk away?--- Will your heart stop beating at the sound of breathing ? will your heartbeat stop at the way you breathe? If you let me love you would you let me chase the *stars* ? Or would you take me one step closer and teach me how to dream ? What are you? are you ? ---------- Well that was torture...formatting is evil, but makes some things look a lot more interesting. I don't think I've done it before. It takes such a long time...(x_X) AND THEN IT FROZE ON ME! I had to start all over...it was painful. Anyway, enjoy if you can. Please note the format; I did it on purpose. Hopefully, it will work. If it doesn't, I think I'll go and take a nap. Either way, I'm going to take a nap. And yes, I'm back for now. -Leah [This message has been edited by chasing rain (09-06-2003 08:13 PM).] |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Leah, i like it, and the thoughts. got me thinking bout how we react to situations, and people. will we stay, or turn away? your hard work paid off. Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
wow...I really did enjoy your thoughts in this piece. And yes the firmat made it baeutiful. Nicely said. Lex |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
Your time was worth the effort! This was a great poem. Every word of this one had me glued to the computer screen! ~Jess "At the touch of love, everything becomes a poem." -Plato |
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jaysh Member
since 2003-04-16
Posts 133IL, USA |
Yes, the format made it lovely, maybe someday I will decide not to be a lazy and write one with a different format. Wonderful job! Keep up the great work! - Janna |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Thank you all for your kind comments. Unfortunately, I have my own doubts about this piece, since it's my first in about 5 months or so. I'm a bit rusty, so please feel free to critique anything I post. I need to grow. Thank you once again! -Leah |
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BabieDoll Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 268BFE |
Great write...I really enjoyed this... ~J.Lynn "In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..." |
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