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Teen Poetry #6

Stealing dreams.

NeverSayDie
Junior Member

since 2001-01-18

Posts 39
Duluth, MN & Grand Forks ND

0 posted 2003-09-04 07:39 PM

I steal

I steal wishes

I steal everything

I know

I know dreams

I steal everything

I hurt

I hurt you

I steal everything

I miss

I miss life

I steal everything

I miss the dreams stolen away by the dawn,
I miss the love of someone so true that it could only be a dream. The morning sun brings renewal for the earth and another day to face my fears.

I fear

I fear you

I fear everything

I lost

I lost you

I fear everything

I find

I find truth

I fear everything

I fear losing you, I have lost you, I lost myself. I searched for months the fog of woe shadowing my life. And now the morning comes and my search shall be left for the night, for the dreams.

cuda04
Junior Member

since 2003-09-03

Posts 46
Wisconsin,USA

1 posted 2003-09-04 11:18 PM

I love the flow of it, but try to make all lines the same length, those breaks kinda make it hard to read...

Always look forward, never look back, dreams are much more refreshing than regrets.

teenpoet
Member

since 2001-10-17

Posts 280
Michigan

2 posted 2003-09-05 09:18 AM

I agree that you should try to have the lines about the same length. But it was good and I liked the rythm of it otherwise.

I am the one, the only, Blue~Phoenix. That is who I am now and forever shall be from this point forward.

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