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Just Once More

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SimpleDiscourse
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since 04-24-2003
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0 posted 09-02-2003 10:34 PM       View Profile for SimpleDiscourse   Email SimpleDiscourse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SimpleDiscourse

wake in the middle of the night
say my name in a whisper
just once more
and just once more
lay awake until morning
slowly realizing i'm not there

write me a letter
filled with promises and regrets
just once more
and just once more
pretend that every written word
holds some hidden feeling

sing me a song
composed in a minor key
just once more
and just once more
play each sad chord
as the melody falls from your eyes

tell me what i want to hear
that this distance makes you weak
just one more
and just once more
ask me if i love you
and let me be afraid to answer.

[just once more i'm putting this all behind me]

[This message has been edited by SimpleDiscourse (09-02-2003 10:48 PM).]

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peachesNcream
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Ocean Of Tears


1 posted 09-03-2003 07:46 PM       View Profile for peachesNcream   Email peachesNcream   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for peachesNcream

I honestly can't believe that no one has replied to this poem yet!

Anyways...THIS WAS FANTASTIC! "Just once more" added so much effect to this piece. Really, I'm not sure what to say because I'm speechless! WONDERFUL WORK! This is def. going in my library!!! ~Jess

"At the touch of love, everything becomes a poem." -Plato

BrokenAngel
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since 01-06-2002
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2 posted 09-03-2003 07:52 PM       View Profile for BrokenAngel   Email BrokenAngel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BrokenAngel

I would have replied sooner but I just now read this peice.  I love how you put all the emotion into it, I take it the relationship went bad.  Wonderful write!!

Read my work and read my thoughts
I'll go back into the night now
---Night Angel

SimpleDiscourse
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3 posted 09-03-2003 08:03 PM       View Profile for SimpleDiscourse   Email SimpleDiscourse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SimpleDiscourse

actually we're still really good friends but i'm still kinda stuck on those days when he had feelings for me and i still kinda have feelings for him but he's over me and..blah blah blah. this is me putting it to a close i guess. thanks for reading. i'm glad you enjoyed it.
cuda04
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since 09-03-2003
Posts 46
Wisconsin,USA


4 posted 09-03-2003 10:56 PM       View Profile for cuda04   Email cuda04   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cuda04

I am sorry to say i can relate to this poem, entirely...i loved it.

Always look forward, never look back, dreams are much more refreshing than regrets.

WinterWren
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...Coming to


5 posted 09-04-2003 01:38 AM       View Profile for WinterWren   Email WinterWren   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WinterWren's Home Page   View IP for WinterWren

Very beautiful poem!! Im just amazed by this. Not one word is out of place!
I really love this poem, sooo much, and I can relate to it too.
I especially love the line,"as the melody fall from your eyes."
Beautiful. A true work of art.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

blueyedlioness
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since 04-24-2003
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6 posted 09-04-2003 01:36 PM       View Profile for blueyedlioness   Email blueyedlioness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for blueyedlioness

Nice job on consistency... beautiful poem.
Spine Grinder
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since 10-28-2000
Posts 1147
Standing In Silence...


7 posted 09-04-2003 06:39 PM       View Profile for Spine Grinder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Spine Grinder

This was great. nice work.

I hate everything about you!
Why do I love you?
You hate everything about me!
Why do you love me?~3 Days Grace

sixington
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since 07-14-2003
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8 posted 09-29-2003 08:24 PM       View Profile for sixington   Email sixington   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sixington

I absolutely loved the repitition in this poem. i can't think of anything to say. Props to you, that was beautiful.
shara
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9 posted 09-30-2003 09:06 AM       View Profile for shara   Email shara   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for shara

girl, tis poem is soooooooooo good, loolk forward to more of your writes, be blessed.
 
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