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Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2003-09-01 02:46 PM



Take me by the hand,
And whisper in my ear,
"Never leave me again,
I need your love, my dear."
Kiss me so gently,
Like it was the first.
My mouth becomes dry,
Like I have an insatiable thirst,
For nothing but you.
My soul is whole again,
As I feel your hand,
Softly caress my skin.
I slowly begin to tremble,
As I feel happiness swell inside me.
My vision has finally cleared,
I can finally see,
That you're the one I love.
I'm falling faster for you,
I look into your eyes and,
Get lost in a love so true.
I hear a voice in the distance,
Saying the words that set me free.
"I'm not afraid anymore."
Who said that? Then I realize,
...It was me...

I hate everything about you!
Why do I love you?
You hate everything about me!
Why do you love me?~3 Days Grace

© Copyright 2003 Staci Weidner - All Rights Reserved
peachesNcream
Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears
1 posted 2003-09-01 07:15 PM


AHHHH!!!!! Yesh yesh, this IS a keeper! Haha.

I know exactly what you are talking about in this piece. Good work, I admire this very much!!!!!!! ~Jess

"At the touch of love, everything becomes a poem." -Plato

Alnilam
Member
since 2003-07-04
Posts 75

2 posted 2003-09-01 07:55 PM


i really enjoyed this...pulled at some heartstrings. thanks for that wake up call

~*Alnilam*~
"The worst tragedy for a poet is to be admired through being misunderstood."

BabieDoll
Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 268
BFE
3 posted 2003-09-02 04:43 PM


My GOD Staci! This poem...it's so beautiful! I loved every part of it...not a line was out of place! You described everything so perfectly! And I'd also like to say...that I'm happy that you *are* finally, truly happy! You deserve every minute of it, so soak it up and bask in it. LOL. I love ya!

~J.Lynn

"In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..."

Toasty
Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 74
my little hole in wisconsin
4 posted 2003-09-02 06:49 PM


wow... absolutely beautiful!
keep up the wonderful work!

~toasty

"Nothing is so strong as gentleness; Nothing so gentle as real strength."  -Francis de Sales.

SilentTears
Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371
Lost and Broken
5 posted 2003-09-07 06:35 PM


Oh Wow, Staci. I love this. This is definitely a beautiful write. Great job. Absolutely loved it. Loves.

"I would sleep forever, if it meant I'd never stop dreaming..."

Spine Grinder
Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...
6 posted 2003-09-07 08:54 PM


Thanks everyone! I'm glad you all liked this!

I hate everything about you!
Why do I love you?
You hate everything about me!
Why do you love me?~3 Days Grace

BrokenAngel
Member
since 2002-01-06
Posts 141
Puryear, TN, USA
7 posted 2003-09-07 11:48 PM


Wow.  You have definatly got a talent at putting every word in the right place.  Great write!!

Read my work and read my thoughts
I'll go back into the night now
---Night Angel

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