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idleeyes86
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since 2003-06-09
Posts 64
Somewhere over the rainbow

0 posted 2003-08-29 01:20 PM


The moment you touch upon it
You're shot with a bullet of life
injected with feeling and excitement
your hands clasp around it
slowing unconsciously tightening
tighter
tighter
suffocating the wire
soon the life life in your veins
is replaced by a pain
burning
yet you still grip harder
every instinct in your body tells you to
let go
yet you continue to cling
despite the pain, the hurt
You are doomed hang on forever
till you are dragged away
or the power is cut.

© Copyright 2003 Chris Murphy - All Rights Reserved
Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
1 posted 2003-08-30 03:10 PM


I absolutely love the title!
The last line made this poem for me. Very desciptive, but still vague. The subject is unknown, but still..the impact was felt.
Nicely done.
~Lex  

[This message has been edited by Lexy (08-30-2003 03:11 PM).]

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