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OtherSideOfTheMirror
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since 2002-12-19
Posts 245


0 posted 2003-08-25 08:51 PM


I don't know what we've done to her
But I know something has changed
Her empty eyes haunt my stares
SHe is a hollow soul
Her happiness brutally stolen
I see in her absent tears
That she has no desire left to feel
And I don't know how she died inside
Or how her gentle wispers faded
I'm sorry, Mom.

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BrokenDreams
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since 2003-02-09
Posts 425
In The Clouds
1 posted 2003-08-26 10:01 AM


Wow. I am going through something similar with my mom, so this really touched me. Actually, it touched me so much that I got goosebumps after reading it. Thanks for the read.

Oh yeah and this is going in my library.

"To handle yourself, use your head; to handle others, use your heart." -Donald Laird

teenpoet
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since 2001-10-17
Posts 280
Michigan
2 posted 2003-08-26 10:30 AM


How heartrending.  I think the same has happened to my mother too.  But it's my fault and my stepdad and my sister's faults and she just seems so listless.  It hurts to know that it's my fault.

Life is a harsh lesson, but enjoyable at times.

peachesNcream
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since 2001-08-21
Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears
3 posted 2003-08-26 09:29 PM


I felt this the whole way through. I was in the same boat with my mom about a year and a half ago. I sure does hurt to know you're the one who caused her the pain. Over time, I'm sure it will heal. Good work! ~Jess

"At the touch of love, everything becomes a poem." -Plato

Rise of Truth
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since 2003-07-12
Posts 59
Beneath the Fury Sun
4 posted 2003-08-28 06:11 PM


This is a mere supposition, however;

Maybe they have realized they aren't in control anymore?

Anyway, of every person you'll ever meet mother is mother, so i hope things work out.  Honestly, i get along more with mine since i moved out.  

Which is more the cause of the ripple, the pebble or the water?

Paul Wilson
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5 posted 2003-08-29 01:04 AM


OtherSideOfTheMirror...This is very good, I really liked reading it. Those 2 words " I'm Sorry" are hard too say, but it's the first step to a better relationship...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

Manth88
Junior Member
since 2003-06-15
Posts 45
IL, USA
6 posted 2003-08-31 02:03 PM


This is very touching. But excellent write.

!^*Manth88*^!

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
7 posted 2003-08-31 04:08 PM


ask her.
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