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Teen Poetry #6
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Lindsay
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since 2003-03-26
Posts 59
South Dakota
0 posted 2003-08-22 11:23 AM


Tears flowing from my eyes
Anger running through my veins
Fear filling my heart
Paranoia taking over my head
Emotions controlling my body
My soul silently fades away
© Copyright 2003 Lindsay Strube - All Rights Reserved
magic_612
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since 2003-07-31
Posts 190
NB, Canada
1 posted 2003-08-22 11:24 AM

this poem is awesome, short but to the point. I especially liked the last line. Great job
BrokenDreams
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since 2003-02-09
Posts 425
In The Clouds
2 posted 2003-08-22 09:28 PM

Normally I don't really like short poems that well, but this one was really good. I also really liked the last line.

"To handle yourself, use your head; to handle others, use your heart." -Donald Laird
sixington
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since 2003-07-14
Posts 53
Utah
3 posted 2003-08-22 11:42 PM

I really liked this. It was short, but i could really feel what you were saying. I think work on rhythm a little more, but other than that, amazing!
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