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Android 18
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since 2002-02-20
Posts 61
Austrailia (My DreamLand)

0 posted 2003-08-22 04:24 AM


The Other Girl


How it hurts me all to much
You kissing another girl
I feel sick to my stomach
My eyesight is just a blurr

Just knowing that I'm not the one
The only one you think about
I used to be that girl, but now
In the cold, I feel left out

You have told me many times
That I sshould not worry so much
Because I'm the only girl
Who's completed by touch

I feel so much being near you
Always wanting hugs and kisses
Other times I want to cry
Maybe I just might be your Mrs.

"Signature line Edited"

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (08-25-2003 09:03 AM).]

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Krystin18
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since 2003-01-19
Posts 20
Ontario, Canada
1 posted 2003-08-22 04:29 AM


i liked it . it was really cute
BrokenDreams
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since 2003-02-09
Posts 425
In The Clouds
2 posted 2003-08-22 10:19 AM


hey, I really liked this, but it seemed to like the end was...I don't know, incomplete maybe...It felt like there should have been more sfter that to sum things up more...Maybe it's just me. Anyway this was a ncie write.

"To handle yourself, use your head; to handle others, use your heart." -Donald Laird

BabieDoll
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since 2003-02-13
Posts 268
BFE
3 posted 2003-08-22 01:42 PM


I really liked this write...BTW I like your signature also. *lmao*

~J.Lynn

"In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..."

peachesNcream
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since 2001-08-21
Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears
4 posted 2003-08-22 11:07 PM


I agree with BrokenDreams. Other than that, great poem...I felt it! Awww yeah, great signature like BabieDoll said! ~Jess

"At the touch of love, everything becomes a poem." -Plato

Pollita
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since 2002-07-25
Posts 220
the unknown realm of insanity
5 posted 2003-08-23 01:26 PM


Hey, Its a really good poem, Im sorry you feel this way *hugs*. you can get through it though, Its possible for everyone to get through it..but ugh, isnt it just so damned frustrating!? lol. anywho, I liked it, its really well done. heh, hopefully you'll feel better soon...If not then add me to msn:
beach_bunny_cutie69@hotmail.com
~*Delaney*~

* A wise monkey never monkies with another monkey's monkey *

Jaime
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6 posted 2003-08-24 09:40 PM


I liked it.. maybe its my mood, maybe its a good poem. I think a combination of the two.

The truth is, you're never going to be the only one a guy thinks about, but you should be the only one he gives his love to. Physically and emotionally. If he is wandering, then he is not the Mr. for you.

jaime.

the faeries creep into my hair at night leaving it in terrible knots

jaime.

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