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Paragon
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since 2003-02-16
Posts 114


0 posted 2003-08-13 01:09 AM



Malevolent waves of fury echo off the walls
painting a vivid mental picture in stereo
the sound of fists on flesh resound through the halls
a child is screaming in agony, and you will never know

The wall thuds with pleasure of a sort
muffled moans and rusty springs creak
weeks later she walks to the clinic to abort
Now she is a whore, information leaked

With a loud crack crimson trickled down the wall
two sets of hands hurtled him against the bricks then
released him letting the unconscious boy fall
Will he ever get up again?

A wall of silence falls between them
he can't think of what to say
she doesn't know how to mend
and make this just go away

these irrevokable, unmistakable
occurences are the walls of pain
they are immovable and unreplacable
forever and ever they shall remain


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Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
1 posted 2003-08-13 06:08 PM


oh my god. this hit my chest harder and made it hard to breath. the things people go through. wow..you protrayed this so clearly. So creatively. The second stanza left me stunned and I read it over and over again. Great poem. Truely great in all its sad material.
Lex..

[This message has been edited by Lexy (08-13-2003 06:08 PM).]

Tequilia_Sunrise
Senior Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 612
Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada
2 posted 2003-08-13 08:11 PM


i really enjoy when people bring topic's up like this because then we know there not being ignored! good write
thank-you

Tequilia

SilentTears
Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371
Lost and Broken
3 posted 2003-08-15 03:32 PM


Oh my God...this was unbelievable. I find it very difficult to write/read a poem like this...it's such a heartbreaking topic. But you portrayed this so well. This type of thing really makes you stop and think about how much worse off people are than you, brings you down a bit, and makes you appreciate the better things in life. Beautiful work. You caught my attention and kept it through-out the entire poem. The word usage was perfect. Beautiful poem...absolutely beautiful. It will definitely be going in my library for future reading. Wonderful poem!

"I would sleep forever, if it meant I'd never stop dreaming..."

Krystin18
Junior Member
since 2003-01-19
Posts 20
Ontario, Canada
4 posted 2003-08-16 10:26 PM


wow.... i was relaly touched by this poem... you kept me so interested all teh way through even though it is a very heartshattering topic to write about... u did a great job

For every minute you spend being angry,
You lose 60 seconds of hapiness.

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