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HeroicVillan
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since 2002-11-09
Posts 34
Lost.....

0 posted 2003-08-10 12:32 PM



i have always wondered
who you really are
it handed me a chance
to heal up my scars

im closer to you now
than i got in the start
you just dove right in
so you could tear me apart

well its over for now
and you got your own way
it all ended too fast
and im the one who'll pay

this poem's not about you
screw it all, i dont care
this wasnt ur fault
its life thats not fair

Dont blame others just because its their fault, or else you'll start blaming yourself because its not....

© Copyright 2003 James Bicknell - All Rights Reserved
Marshalzu
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since 2001-02-15
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Lurking
1 posted 2003-08-10 10:29 AM


Great writing HV, I really enjoyed the read

Andy

Tequilia_Sunrise
Senior Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 612
Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada
2 posted 2003-08-13 09:51 PM


I love you message in this poem! great write.
Thank-you

Tequilia

SilentTears
Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371
Lost and Broken
3 posted 2003-08-15 10:29 PM


I agree with Tequilia...nice message you're conveying. I enjoyed this poem. Thanks for the read.  

"I would sleep forever, if it meant I'd never stop dreaming..."

[This message has been edited by SilentTears (08-15-2003 10:30 PM).]

Lexy
Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
4 posted 2003-08-16 04:09 PM


this was really good up until the lst stanza, I guess it just rubbed me the wrong way. Good point you make.

magic_612
Member
since 2003-07-31
Posts 190
NB, Canada
5 posted 2003-08-16 08:15 PM


I really like the quote you used at the end, very true.
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